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Sunshine
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0 posted 2006-01-09 05:30 PM



Huan Yi’s challenge – the Rush of 40’s

The wise man in my life leaned down
with blue earnest eyes beseeching green,

don’t rush it, don’t wish your life away,
his serious becoming a complex nest
for life, the eggs it could hold,
the promise of wings…

he held on too hard for everyone, but you’ve
heard that story before…
he left before I could enter 40, and I had kept
from him, yes, that I had wished a few times away…

can’t wait for this day to end…
can’t wait for the kids to grow up…
can’t wait until I can just relax…
can’t wait, can’t wait, can’t wait…


The can’t waits were as good as wishing
one’s life away…as I slid through most
of my 40’s while still listening to Neil singing
Girl, you’ll be a woman, soon…

oh, damn, he was wishing me away, too…

My 40’s were still child-rearing-child with child…
marking moments that someday Alzheimer’s
might erase…babies births, magic moments,
nuances noticed, a touch to aging skin…
marking it with a poem.

Then I slowed down, just toward the last
of a moment before the turn, to find
an instant in space, some virtual reality, of place,
almost through the 48th movement, slowing pace,
then rapidly beating in staccato time, to rhyme,
to rhyme, to rhyme, to pick up this pace
this time and place, this heart that beat in quest of life,
never forgetting the be of child, youth, woman, wife…

following the dream, stretching the seem…
skinning the seam…allow this metamorphosis flight
into some high….this blend into some new space,
this new place, this new sigh…
and now they ask me,
look back and see
as I was, then, in my 40’s….

some of us mature late in life.

I am just now….

touching youth,

my time for notice me left for some new form….

who will rush too soon to beyond.


"There's a reason they call God The Creator - he sides with talent." Julia Cameron

© Copyright 2006 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-01-09 05:42 PM


This is amazing, Sis.. your abilty to make everyone relate to what your'e feeling is astounding.. the interplay of words, the dance of rhyme, all putty in your hands.
Well done once again

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2 posted 2006-01-09 05:55 PM


Glad to see this take on things, SiL.  Makes me feel younger just reading it!   ...jo
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3 posted 2006-01-09 07:15 PM


"can’t wait for this day to end…
can’t wait for the kids to grow up…
can’t wait until I can just relax…
can’t wait, can’t wait, can’t wait"

Sissie...I sure know what you mean!!  

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4 posted 2006-01-09 09:08 PM


Amazing write Karilea.
Keepin' this for sure.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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5 posted 2006-01-09 09:31 PM


ill remember this when in my 40's but its also very good advice for my 30's now in my second year.  Lovely reading

Julie

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6 posted 2006-01-09 10:39 PM


The can’t waits were as good as wishing
one’s life away…as I slid through most
of my 40’s while still listening to Neil singing
Girl, you’ll be a woman, soon…


This is soooo true

Kristabell
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7 posted 2006-01-09 10:42 PM


Yes, this is true. In more ways than one.

Enjoyed,
Kristabell

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8 posted 2006-01-10 10:05 AM


hope I feel this way when I turn 40
(again)
enjoyed you here ms sun

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9 posted 2006-01-10 10:17 AM


"can’t wait for this day to end…
can’t wait for the kids to grow up…
can’t wait until I can just relax…
can’t wait, can’t wait, can’t wait…"

Well, there's a verse I never thought I'd relate to...  
Hiya Kari!


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10 posted 2006-01-10 01:50 PM


this was exceptional writing, but my favorite part was

Then I slowed down, just toward the last
of a moment before the turn, to find
an instant in space, some virtual reality, of place,
almost through the 48th movement, slowing pace,
then rapidly beating in staccato time, to rhyme,
to rhyme, to rhyme, to pick up this pace
this time and place, this heart that beat in quest of life,
never forgetting the be of child, youth, woman, wife…

and knowing me the way you do, I'm certain you know why...

this was absolutely beautiful



Thank you

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11 posted 2006-01-14 09:04 AM


following the dream, stretching the seem…
skinning the seam…allow this metamorphosis flight
into some high….this blend into some new space,
this new place, this new sigh…
and now they ask me,
look back and see
as I was, then, in my 40’s….
When I am out of my forties and into my fifties, remind me to look back then...

oh....no...don't remind me...groans...

I may rememember things I just dont want to until then.     
Loved this sunny lady!

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12 posted 2006-01-14 09:33 AM


"can’t wait for this day to end…
can’t wait for the kids to grow up…
can’t wait until I can just relax…
can’t wait, can’t wait, can’t wait…"

This sounds SO much like me way back then..
Excellent write Karilea.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

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13 posted 2006-01-14 07:30 PM


Oh, Damn, this brought tears to my eyes, seriously.

its beautiful, Kari.

I am just now….

touching youth,


May you always . . . BE.

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14 posted 2006-01-14 07:35 PM


As one who went to bed one night a fourteen year old girl in love praying for eighteen so I could marry and then waking up as a forty year old grandma, I totally understand and can relate to all you've eloquently said here.
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15 posted 2006-01-16 03:53 PM


KJ,  why is it you know all those things
that I know...???????? Huh?  Tell me...
Beautifully done my friend,  yes indeed!

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16 posted 2006-01-16 07:04 PM


Then I slowed down, just toward the last
of a moment before the turn, to find
an instant in space, some virtual reality, of place,


so true but for me... in the next decade~~~

hugs
M

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17 posted 2006-01-16 07:33 PM


"Then I slowed down, just toward the last
of a moment before the turn, to find
an instant in space, some virtual reality, of place,
almost through the 48th movement, slowing pace,
then rapidly beating in staccato time, to rhyme,
to rhyme, to rhyme, to pick up this pace
this time and place, this heart that beat in quest of life,
never forgetting the be of child, youth, woman, wife…

following the dream, stretching the seem…
skinning the seam…allow this metamorphosis flight
into some high….this blend into some new space,"


Sunshine,

   Following the dream, stretching the seem!
You offer so much inspiration, my friend!

cathy

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18 posted 2006-01-18 12:44 PM


Yet another wonderful poem. You never disappoint!

smiles,
Constance

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19 posted 2006-01-19 09:34 PM


This poem has so much wisdom and grace in it, Karilea.  Truly remarkable - just like you.  You captured all those "can't waits" with just the right mix of regret and longing.  It hits home so very well.
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20 posted 2006-01-25 01:36 AM


Don't give "beyond" a second thought....whether you believe in a heaven or not, the thought of it can be better than the now....and there's certainly no more to fear.

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