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dark end of voices---Masquerade Challenge
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dark end of voices---Masquerade Challenge |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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A still breath on a summer breeze the dark end of voices no drops of peace above your stone under the rivers rush of aging heart slower the burn where I have tried to capture this emotion from chest to palm and broken light pressing each curve between hollow and stirring even when rain settles the taste of ash floating on air this eternal image of petal and reflection such beautiful harmony to disappear within his breath between his lips just that moment when I will notice the stars as the fingers of my soul crimson will bled soft in midnights dreams and your softer pleading will move your edge of soul amidst each endless night to shift reason for the cross you bear there are no borders until we tear the memory of changing time between horizon and sky &hollow shapes I will forget my palms are pressed and my lips thirsty and the dark end of voices where dead memories lie will sink into earth letting stillness move onward untouched ~~**~~**~~**~~ there is so much talent within this poet, I dont think i could ever come close --but I tired.....  I don’t mind spending everyday Out on your corner in the pouring rain Look for the girl with the broken smile Ask her if she wants to stay awhile |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Man, this is an amazing write, I have 2 on my mind, cannot decide which. Beautiful job, Lauren, but I dont want to guess just yet. Let's see what others see and I hope I am right. I think I am. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Beautifully haunting, Lauren! I'm afraid to guess.  jo |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Actually, I thought this read like Sue... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Awwww, Susan!! I was late with it!! I also thought it sounded like Sue (Littlewing) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang this is beautiful.. I could be wrong.. But, it reads like something by littlewing/Sue. Lovely indeed Lauren. Well done! Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Aye I read Sue, littlewing, here excellent write |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm guessing Sue, too. But ya'll are both such lovely poets, it's difficult to discern... Brava, sweet Lauren!  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
my guess is Sue as well. whoever it is for and about...tis lovely! hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Susie yes, but i also see our Gemjop |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
It is Sue, and all I can say is she writes with such a depth....if anyone could bring me here to write and take part in that challenge, tis her... miss being here, and read when I have time to....work keeps me rather busy right now, but 2006 promises to be better.....hugsss and love to all....and Sue, thanks for your inspiration....always...  I don’t mind spending everyday |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
OMG I am RETARDED . . . I was gonna say Gem . . . I never thought someone would try and write me and Um . . . this is way too good to be me Lauren. Not even kidding. Gosh, I am really honored, smiling huge over here . . . thank you . . . so much. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Lauren I was too busy guessing who it was, I forgot to tell you just how magnificent I this is. A challenge well met indeed. Mxx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I have to be honest, I peeked at the other replies first ~ but I have to say that our littlewing is who fluttered into my mind as I was reading your fine piece of writing!  Linda |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"even when rain settles the taste of ash floating on air this eternal image of petal and reflection such beautiful harmony to disappear within his breath between his lips just that moment" Damn Loopy, you did a great job of poetically masking your words in Sue's style. I'm impressed, truly...  |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
A very good poem,I really enjoyed it alot.. paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Loopy? *laughing over here* You know what Lauren, this sounds like we did a duet? How the hell did you do that? |
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