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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2006-01-08 10:24 PM


Oh Jack
Where have you been?

We miss you
And certainly, our children do

You were “box office” those many years ago
Ubiquitous, and had all the juicy roles

You were, in short,
The Leonardo DiCaprio of fairy tale
And now, hardly a mention

I remember you as a child star
Furtive, in a darkened corner
Eating pilfered pie with your fingers

Or in more rambunctious parts
Nimble and quick, showing off
With athletic aplomb

An “action hero” in your prime
In a classic quest for redemption
Outwitting a giant, taking his treasure

As an older man, rail thin and pleased
Happily living with his full-bottomed wife
Devouring life between them

I met Another Jack back then, too
The one-eyed kind

A second grader from across town
A mysterious place to kids like me

Where dads, when there was one
Didn’t have jobs

The playgrounds were streets
Clothing and toys were catch as catch can

So, for part of your lunch, or money to buy one
Jack would lift his black pirates’ patch

And give you a glimpse
That what was hiding behind it

Was simply another riddle
A fable without rhyme
A parable lacking reason

A dark red rawness, deep in his head

© Copyright 2006 E.F.Rose - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2006-01-08 10:38 PM


Jack was nimble
much too quick
jumping over candlesticks

and passing greenery too slow

Jack fell down
he scoffed the crown
and Jill she offered medi-stick

and laughing scenery too fast

Mother Goose was much too loose
and Jim? he killed the duck.

(that makes sense to somebody)

grin?

I miss y'yeti...


Duncan
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2 posted 2006-01-08 10:42 PM


Yep, it's a bit of an unsettling night, here too.  I think it's the relentless dreariness of this winter and the thought that there's so much more of it still to come.  
Nice surprise this was, Ed.  Glad I stopped 'round the fire tonight...  

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Gaia
3 posted 2006-01-08 10:44 PM


sigh
you've gotta do this more often,
this decoupage stuff

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2006-01-08 10:48 PM


or bowling
iliana
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5 posted 2006-01-09 01:56 AM


The places and events names bring -- very interesting reading, Ed.  BTW, Happy 2006! ...jo
littlewing
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6 posted 2006-01-09 08:59 AM


When you told me of Jack, you never told me of his alter ego's or the winding paths he would take,

then again, I guess that only happens in your head there Mr. Rose.

A beautiful thing, indeed.

It is so good to see you in here.

I miss your writing.

(Billy Collins --->  pshaw)

But here:

Was simply another riddle
A fable without rhyme
A parable lacking reason

A dark red rawness, deep in his head


You describe life itself so very clear.



Earth Angel
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7 posted 2006-01-09 09:10 AM


Ed, each and every poem that you write, is a perfect "Rose". Flowers
~ with each petal to be appreciated and enjoyed!


Linda

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8 posted 2006-01-09 12:54 PM


I'm gonna beg you, Ed....PLEASE do a HOBO POEM FOR ME.

(I could hear your voice as I read through the terminology.)

Um, I mean that as a compliment.

And I miss hearing your voice, too.

Enchantress
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9 posted 2006-01-09 01:14 PM


Excellent write here Ed...
You have been SO missed here at Passions.
May we ask for more please?
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

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Tamarac Fla
10 posted 2006-01-09 01:47 PM


wranx
Your tale has a mercury feel, with a quick silver appeal. Enjoyed

Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 2006-01-09 03:22 PM


you see life in such an unfiltered way..

it makes those of us that don't, want to follow close behind so all the debris gets cut away.

  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Sunshine
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12 posted 2006-01-09 04:21 PM


Wranx...

I may have been one of the first to have read this, earlier this morning.  But...you laid so many Jacks on the table, I had to go through my own hand to see if I had any left, or if, perhaps, were I to play Old Maid, I could match you, somehow, for the memories you splayed before us.

The compliments, responses, comments, are on the table, Sir...

but to this, I add my story of memories, and would not up the ante, but just thank you for the game of memory, and allow that you should deal another hand...

for the hoboes.

.

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13 posted 2006-01-09 05:27 PM


I have read this three times over the past day....each time taking a different feeling away with me....indeed poetry Ed.....
littlewing
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14 posted 2006-01-09 05:39 PM


Karen?

I just told him the same thing about the Hobo poem . . . because you damn well know he will pull it off beyond anything we can imagine.

Duncan
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15 posted 2006-01-10 11:07 AM


Waiting...  

littlewing
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16 posted 2006-01-10 10:16 PM


*nudge*  . . . me tooooo

(Oh I'm in trouble now, ain't I)

XOx Uriah xOX
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17 posted 2006-02-15 04:11 AM


LOL  ROFL  hahahaha   This is the 3rd of your posts I have discovered.  First was your Tuesdays poem.  I became an instant fan.  Then...Your "End of Time", and all I could do was ::bow::   Now this...     And I must laugh!
I have to laugh!  I am so impressed !  I mean deep to the marrow of my bone and core of my soul...IMPRESSED !!!!   I laugh because, this is a very rare phenomenon for me. Should it continue, I face the fear of granting you "guru" status.  LOL  But, I MUST continue.
Regardless...  Thank you for touching me so !
As I am about to move on, in search of more of your posts... Thank you for these prior 3 that have impressed me so much and  brought such pleasure into the moment of SEEING.  LOL
If my life was not already filled with blessings overflowing...   These alone...  LOL ...   Have been worth the price of admission.    ::bows::

PouringJewels
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18 posted 2006-02-17 06:15 AM


Maybe Jack ate too much fat or he fell down a hill or got burned or fell down the beanstock or the house he built crashed down on him, I guess he wasnt that nimble.
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