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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2006-01-08 02:23 PM


When I turned forty
I wanted to release
doves
but buying birds
seemed ludicrous
besides
it cost too much
so I thought, "butterflies"
they might suffice
like at weddings
that I'd seen
but still, that cost
a bit too much
and I scratched that idea
off of my list

after much thought
I decided to purchase
a tiara
and coronate myself

because
after living a life of

somebody's daughter
somebody's sister
somebody's girlfriend
somebody's student
somebody's mistress
somebody's wife
somebody's mother

I could finally be...myself.
I would reign the realm of me
with all the dignity of queen.

And indeed, a line did form
and had I owned them
I might have worn gloves
to shake the hands so formally
and yes, some even humored me
with a curtsy or a bow

but little did I know back then
that I was not saying "hello"

renewed in life upon a throne

but goodbyes and grief, godspeed - to me -

and then to them.


*  *  *

Huan Yi's challenge: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000674.html


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1 posted 2006-01-08 02:29 PM


My forties were better than my thirties. Which in reality isn't saying much...lol.
Nowadays I wear a tiara whenever I can haul myself out of bed in the morning.

You are simply amazing Karen. I tip my tiara to you and if I could, I would hug away your tears. luv, Chrislane

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Enchantress
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2 posted 2006-01-08 03:15 PM


I think I looked and felt my best in my forties..
But I also think every woman looks good
at any age wearing a tiara!!
Be your own person...that's the ticket.
Heart hugs to ya darlin' lady.


In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

littlewing
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3 posted 2006-01-08 04:19 PM


although I cannot yet succumb to this challenge, I can surely empathize with your message . . .

Doesn't take an age for those kind of goodbyes . . .

Bringing me right to you, as you always do, K.

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4 posted 2006-01-08 04:40 PM


"but goodbyes and grief, godspeed - to me -

and then to them."

KEWL write, Blaze.

CB 8)

"Only the dead, have seen the end of war."
Plato

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5 posted 2006-01-08 05:23 PM



Didn't see the challenge,
but saw Huan's poem...

and your poem...

and I shall pick up the glove...




serenity blaze
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6 posted 2006-01-08 06:08 PM




thank you

all for reading.

and grin, although I know it would soooooo behoove John/Huan to honor me with an acknowledgement, I just look at it as part of being forty. (ish?)

Every day, in every way, I become more like Kathy Bates! and oh I celebrate...



ta for now


ice
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7 posted 2006-01-08 08:46 PM


Karen
What can I say?......What I expected from reading the title, with your name next to it, was excellence..and I certainly was not dissapointed....

I just read your critique banner.....lmao

Seriously-I love the poem...


_______  ___ice
     ><>  


wranx
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8 posted 2006-01-08 10:16 PM


I've found most things turn out contrary to plan

Could be why I seldom make them

You always amaze, m'witch, no matter the topic

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9 posted 2006-01-08 10:22 PM


lol
neener, and then some
loved this
iwiwt

iliana
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10 posted 2006-01-09 01:32 AM


Gospeed to you!  As always, you send me spinning into deep thought.  *hugs* jojo
Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 2006-01-09 11:56 AM


and I am your number one fan!!!!

just hugs...lots and lots of hugs.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2006-01-09 01:52 PM


serenity,
You are a natural dancer and I might add prancer. LOL

The Lady
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13 posted 2006-01-09 05:03 PM




"When I turned forty
I wanted to release
doves"

Maybe not what you had planned but beautifully done.


You have much to celebrate.


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14 posted 2006-01-09 05:25 PM


I am betting you grace life fully at any age....this is wonderful Karen, and leaves me wanting more....hugssss and much love...
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15 posted 2006-01-13 02:49 PM


I knew this would be good... but it's even better than I'd anticipated... and went straight to my heart. *S*
Angelheart
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16 posted 2006-01-13 02:52 PM


very interesting write, thanks for sharing this, keep up the awesome poetry.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

Dark Angel
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17 posted 2006-01-13 04:50 PM


always an amazing write from you m'lady... and I echo what Laren said...."I am betting you grace life fully at any age"  

btw, I am meeting Ms Forty this year, any hints? anything i should know?..ummmm
a n y t h i n g  at all?....something?
Is she nice?  lol

love you Gorgeous

Mxx

how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more
~Neruda~

Dominique-Simone
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18 posted 2006-01-14 01:52 AM


This is quite a beautiful write.. excellent job.
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