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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2006-01-08 10:11 AM


Subtle Poison

I rolled it in my hands when young
Without the feeling being stung
But youth is when we test our strength
And we go to almost any length

Quick silver stays within the lane
A subtle poison drives you insane
Delivering light a bright summers view
Infecting the form of mornings dew

It flows like the tide of a river
Affecting the mind and the liver
Slowly building a delta of mud
Where nothing can grow or come to bud

It is a poison of subtle drain
Once ingested there’s no refrain
It works its way into your mind
Until your eyes and thoughts are blind

So do not touch quick silvers bright
No matter how bright the light


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2006-01-08 10:14 AM



Sy...this brought back
a very, very old memory...

but as always,
you leave a lesson behind.

Good Sunday Morning, m'friend.








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2 posted 2006-01-08 10:22 AM


Ah but the quick silver is so tempting Sy.  Well done.

believe in what your heart feels...

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2006-01-08 10:25 AM


Good morning, Sir Sonneteer!

"So do not touch quick silvers bright
No matter how bright the light"

~ I consider myself duly warned! All that glitters is not gold! ~ But of course, you are the exception to that rule!

Love you, T-Man!
EA


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4 posted 2006-01-08 10:39 AM


Wise words Seymour. Too many good people have fallen prey to this temptation.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

ice
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5 posted 2006-01-08 11:16 AM


Very good, See More


"It is a poison of subtle drain
Once ingested there’s no refrain
It works its way into your mind
Until your eyes and thoughts are blind"

This poem could stand as  metaphor for many different things...first love, first drink, first illicit drug....etc...

But I'll enjoy it at its face value...

_______  ____ice
     ><>

SmartChick
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6 posted 2006-01-08 03:50 PM


As always, you wrote this beautifully.
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7 posted 2006-01-08 08:40 PM


very creative warning...

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions.  - ANON.



wranx
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8 posted 2006-01-08 10:21 PM


Good Lord!

Yes, I remember playing with Mercury as a kid
Someone always seemed to have a small vial of it...I recall being awed by the way it married itself to a quarter (Silver, in those days)

Now, I feel lucky to recall anything at all

iliana
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9 posted 2006-01-09 01:48 AM


Some lessons we learn too late, but maybe that's just our own perception.  A lesson learned is a lesson learned, yes?   Beautifully written, Sy.   jo
tracie66
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10 posted 2006-01-09 04:22 AM


Dear Sy
interesting write, enjoyed the message... I'm guessing that a quick silver is some sort of alcoholic beverage

~hugs~
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2006-01-09 07:50 AM


Sunshine
Ii was sure you had touched quick silver at some time.

scorpio
Yes it is.

Earth Angel
Dangerous talk. LOL

Chris
That is true.

ice
Although the incident is true you saw the metaphor.

SmartChick
Thank you my dear.

SmartChick
Glad you enjoyed the read.

wranx
I remember the weird feeling of the metal rolling around in my hand to this day.
Who knew the danger LOL.

iliana
Yes and thank you.

tracie66
Mercury is a liquid silvr metal and poisonus
To life. But in this poem it could be alcohol it was used as a metaphor.

littlewing
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12 posted 2006-01-09 09:08 AM


Goodness, so much can be gleaned here for I saw a poisonous relationship in that silver:

It flows like the tide of a river
Affecting the mind and the liver
Slowly building a delta of mud
Where nothing can grow or come to bud




Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2006-01-09 09:56 AM


littlewing
Stay  in flight dear its no place to land. LOL

dgvarner
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14 posted 2006-01-12 11:14 AM


I read this as Pabst Blue Ribbon's silver can being lifted to drain a liver of its life...
I agree with ICE, it could be a metaphor for many things...

great write!

hugs, g

"We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched."  Lord Byron

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2006-01-12 12:04 PM


dgvarner
Thank you and it's nice to see you here.

LeeJ
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16 posted 2006-01-12 01:21 PM


Quick silver stays within the lane
A subtle poison drives you insane
Delivering light a bright summers view
Infecting the form of mornings dew


How did I miss this, and you?
when did you sneak in?  Sy, your a light that shines always, incredible write

Martie
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17 posted 2006-01-12 01:30 PM


Sy...I remember as a young mother, shaking down the thermometor and shaking it right out of my hand....of course it broke into many little round pieces of mercury that had the kids facinated...luckily I knew it was dangerous.  Can't remember how I cleaned it up...except that it was tricky.  Enjoyed this as I enjoy all your poetry!  

PS  How do you clean it up?

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18 posted 2006-01-13 03:04 PM


I'm with wranx... feeling lucky to recall at all... for mercury fascinated me and I'd sneak any opportunity to play with those wondrous shining globules... Fortunately, such opportunities were few, far between and very VERY brief... my mother had eyes in the back of her head... and both sides, too! LOL

You wrote this beautifully, my friend... so many things are pretty to look at... and pure poison. Well done!!

Seymour Tabin
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19 posted 2006-01-13 05:49 PM


LeeJ
Thank you sweety.

Martie
It seems everyone has had an encounter with quick silver.

suthern
Thank you, you got the whole message.

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