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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2006-01-06 11:29 AM


Rewrite


Heart Beat

In the utter of impart
I heard the flutter of my heart
Beating ire of desire
A dragon spewing fire

Seeking in each draining power
Essence of its living hour
Gulping in each seethe of air
To breathe the fire of its dare

Each beat draws in a tighter skin
Drawing on the will within
Echoing the walled abyss
Searching out each tell tale kiss

Like hands that stretch before the blind
Seeking out a touch to find
The promise of a gardens space
The harbor of forever’s grace

It’s when naïve can chart believe
That part of art, can have its Eve

© Copyright 2006 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2006-01-06 11:51 AM


Good morning, Sweet Sonneteer!

Seek and ye shall find

~ "The promise of a gardens space
The harbor of forever’s grace"

Yet another fine spill from thy quill!

Love 'n hugs,
EA


Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2006-01-06 04:39 PM


Afternoon dear Sy!
Yet another lovely from your magic pen.
Have a great weekend.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

MARK V SHELDON
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In a corporeal internship...
3 posted 2006-01-06 04:59 PM


Seymour, I don't know how you do it, but it seems that each poem you channel is better than the last!  This one really resonates with me -- especially the stanza before the ending couplet...  Awesome imagery!  A wholesome, healthy, and jovial New Year to you, my friend.

-MVS

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tracie66
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4 posted 2006-01-06 09:10 PM


loved all of your poem dear Sy but the 4th stanza my fav....simply devine write

~hugs~
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



scorpio
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right...there
5 posted 2006-01-06 09:41 PM


Sy well done!!

believe in what your heart feels...

Magnus
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6 posted 2006-01-06 10:20 PM


I do so much enjoy your little tales that
you compose so perfectly...

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2007-04-26 07:19 PM


To breathe the fire of its dare~~
bringing you back to life

perfectly you, Sy

M

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