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ahiru
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0 posted 2006-01-05 12:46 PM



clean,
and classic,
and modern,
and chic,
not boring
epitome of confidence
a bold statement.
Nothing compares,
to stark,
pure,
clean
white.
It has no common trait,
with any other colour.
Lamenting colours essence
A pouring barrel,
laughing at the coloured doors.
The white walls stare
a secret love for
the clear
reflective mirrors,
Transparency,
The only thing to out beautify
the clean face,
of white.
Their secrets
lies,
they lie.



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Eliyah_becomes
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1 posted 2006-01-05 12:54 PM


your poem creates a great mistique, hidden within the lines that brings a beauty to the common faced words

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2 posted 2006-01-05 02:47 AM


Welcome to PiP!

Fantastic first poem, I love the way you put your words together in this. Hope to see more from you!

and then He created the horse...

tracie66
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3 posted 2006-01-05 05:10 AM


welcome!
fantastic first post, i enjoyed this very much and can't wait to see more from you

~hugs~
Tracie

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It is the harmony of the universe



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4 posted 2006-01-05 06:16 AM


interesting first post created mystery but also was very well put together. I will look forward to post number two.

Julie

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5 posted 2006-01-05 09:33 AM


I adore this, Welcome to PIP!

(especially since I have just started painting, I see the undertones here, as well.

Beautiful writing.

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2006-01-05 10:02 AM


Love your first post!!

Please check your email for a special greeting!

Susan

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~Unknown~

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7 posted 2006-01-05 11:05 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
I very much enjoyed your first post.
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

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8 posted 2006-01-05 11:17 AM


Ahiru~

A hearty WELCOME to PiP !!!

I greatly enjoyed the pour of white thoughts down the pages of blue~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email -           noles1@totcon.com     

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9 posted 2006-01-06 02:35 AM


It has no common trait,
with any other colour.
Lamenting colours essence
A pouring barrel,
laughing at the coloured doors.

  
  
...greatness !!! and good word play
~J

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10 posted 2006-01-06 07:36 AM


Ahiru...

I will look forward to even more
of your poetry.

Welcome to Passions!


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