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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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sun stop shining let me hide there’s nothing to see less to be pointless this try to send you away like a cop shucking lookers fatigued to action by the over and over face that won’t leave it is not my time to be warm even on one side if you must mock with light mock me cold down in the dark where you don’t go or mock the grass at least it can grow [This message has been edited by Ratleader (01-04-2006 09:18 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
pointless this try to send you away ~*~  ~*~ thus the winter's shoal to cling, to bring to thought all wiser things, that you would not have wondered, oh, it is true, if the sun could be, that which you'd rule...  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
It makes me sad when people ache so much. Your poem is exquisite, but I wish it was happier. - Owl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...I'm sorry you are sad. Your poem made my heart ache.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ ' it is not my time to be warm even on one side' Oh, do I ever know this ... and there are those times that it knows me too, too well~ Sometimes I just think I owe it to myself to find the time to 'hide' ... for after awhile, I seek once more the sun of friendship's warm comfort~ *HUGLETING* you ... ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Damn, I love this write, my mood exactly. *clink* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I hope I can, Marge....I hope I can, but it really isn't up to me. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I've seen days like this, too, Ed. One in particular, and I'm not kidding, was many years ago on a drive home from college. My heart was broken, but the sun was shinning; just the most glorious day; and I wondered to myself why it wasn't as dark and gloomy as me. Within a half hour, the clouds folded in and surrounded me and I ended up in the middle of a horrendous hail storm. That was the day of the Xenia tornado which pretty much wiped out the greater part of that city in Ohio, as well as causing tremendous damage to a broad range in SW Ohio. And the moral of this story is: BCWYWF. Really, I do understand despite my weird sense of humor. ....jo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
(....mental note....be very careful not to get Iliana mad at me.......) ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
 ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
it is not my time to be warm even on one side if you must mock with light mock me cold down in the dark where you don’t go or mock the grass at least it can grow I've read this many times today... and like it more with each reading (Mind you... it's the superb writing I'm liking... not the pain that prompted it... just thought I'd make that clear *G*) I know that place where warmth and light are so alien they seem intrusive... you write it so well I feel the chill... Excellent work!! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Oh Ed, my heart goes out to you. How can sadness cause such great writing? best to you martyjo |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Love this dialogue with the sun ... it's as if I heard also the sun's answer, it says "I am your ally, even if you don't collaborate". Intense write. Love, Margherita |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ya know i understand this. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
There are those days when the sunshine is glorious and then, there ARE those days, you'd just like it to tone down those deafening rays! Could really relate to this! Yes, I remember days I wanted to shrink down small enough to hide under a leaf. No one would see me, and there I could hide from the sun. Outstanding poetry, Ed. Now on the brighter side... sending you a smile! misce |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The day is very dark and dreary here....where is that sun?? Understanding this poem even more today, so I'm sending you a hug. |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
It is only the things which we charish most that bother most offen. Nice write. Kristabell |
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