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playing.with.crayons
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0 posted 2006-01-03 05:19 AM



A smile
cracked her face in half
Right
down
the middle

Don't hold your breath
it won't last long
her fingers are already
growing tighter
around the glass

How could you tell?
she thought she hid it so well
but oh
For those winter days

The glass falls to the floor
and a laugh squeezes
through the air
constricted.
Lips stained red
at the edges

She sways
to the music in her head
kneeling in front of me
saying nothing but
"please, please, please"
with tears in her eyes
and 'love' in her throat

"She's a lovely woman
such a trooper
raising a child on her own"

they don't see her
with her head in the toilet
Eight different men a week.

They don't see me
either.

© Copyright 2006 cheye - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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1 posted 2006-01-03 05:37 AM


right to the chest, this went right to my chest

strong words, amazing writing.


playing.with.crayons
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2 posted 2006-01-03 07:01 AM


*smiles* thanks littlewing. risky business, this writing things down thing...
always, xxx

Margherita
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3 posted 2006-01-03 07:04 AM


Impressive poem

... and deeply touching.

Shadows that hurt.

Welcome to Pip!

Love,
Margherita

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Riding
4 posted 2006-01-03 02:23 PM


This is fantastic  

Welcome to PiP, I look forward to seeing more of you!

and then He created the horse...

playing.with.crayons
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since 2006-01-02
Posts 362
Neverland
5 posted 2006-01-04 02:10 AM


thanks for the lovely welcome everybody. I have been a ghost reader for a couple of years now and wanted so much to write nice little replies to all the poems that influenced my writing. So thank you guys!
always, cheye xxx

farewell the ash-tray girl

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