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Dominique-Simone
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0 posted 2006-01-03 12:15 PM



Couldn’t imagine it was you
at the stopping post,
riddled with pink.
and that big fat bow in your hair!
people normally don’t
stare unless there is a reason,
but those eyes of yours don’t notice
a damn thing.
I wonder why, Virginia
do you think that those heels
look good?
5 inches and your feet are falling out,
my goodness what have you done?
too many hoho’s and ding dongs
suddenly you’ve
become a bottle of pepto bismo;
and that bow
are you 12
like I said I couldn’t imagine it was you
so I just walked away

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littlewing
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1 posted 2006-01-03 12:19 PM


Oh My, I am sorry but this did make me grin:

5 inches and your feet are falling out,
my goodness what have you done?


exhale
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2 posted 2006-01-04 01:32 AM


too many hoho’s and ding dongs
suddenly you’ve
become a bottle of pepto bismo;


definitly a guilty giggle   ,
great write.

garysgirl
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3 posted 2006-01-04 01:41 AM


I have seen people this way and you're
right....they don't even seem to notice the
stares, for some reason. It's sad and funny
at the same time. But, if I giggle, I feel
guilty.
Good writing.
Hugs,
Ethel

playing.with.crayons
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Neverland
4 posted 2006-01-04 02:03 AM


oh wonderful! *grins* excellent. Can't tell you how much I've felt like that. Think I'll show it to a certain somebody....
xxx

farewell the ash-tray girl

iliana
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5 posted 2006-01-04 02:53 AM


Ethyl said it best, I think.  Enjoyed your writing.
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2006-01-04 09:53 AM


eeek..

Maybe they did know and didn't care?  Maybe they were just sick of pleasing the crowds and finally decided to please themselves?

Not everyone desires to be socially accepted.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Dominique-Simone
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7 posted 2006-01-04 10:01 AM


I understand that not everyone is a size 6 and i truly wasn't making fun of large people. I am not even a 6 or a cute little girl. I wrote this in another voice and actually I do not know anyone named virgina...
OwlSA
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8 posted 2006-01-04 12:12 PM


I am from South Africa and our sizes work differently so I don't know how big a size 6 is.  I enjoyed your poem immensely.  It is good to write what one thinks, sometimes.  It helps us not to be hurtful. It seemed so real (as do all the poems of yours that I have read)even though it isn't, but that is obviously one of your many fortés.  I like the term you used in your response - "wrote it in a different voice".  

- Owl

Dominique-Simone
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9 posted 2006-01-04 03:29 PM


Thank you all for your comments
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