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DejaEntendu
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since 2005-12-06
Posts 82
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2006-01-02 09:03 PM



first off, i'd like to thank anyone who has posted on any of my poems. I always appreciate feedback/ input. so without further ado:

Usual

Thoughts are worthless,
until they're spoken,
but your ambition,
suffices enough for both of us.
So I cave,
into old ways,
but it's okay,
a pattern is a pattern for a reason.
I've become regular,
ordinary, mundane,
the lamp on your desk,
shines light on your work,
more truthful than me,
I despise it,
longing to be,
to mean,
give me reason,
or else,
as if anyone is buying it...

Please let me know what you honestly think of it, it's a lot diffrent than how I usually write.

© Copyright 2006 G Rapp - All Rights Reserved
pictureme2
Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 194

1 posted 2006-01-02 10:46 PM


I enjoyed this read. Alot of thoughts
hidden when the lamp light goes
out.  Puts alot of ideas in the readers
mind.....and than plants the seed of
doubt in the end with the ending line.
"as if anyone is buying it..."
pictureme2

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