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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2006-01-02 08:56 AM



I always hate it when Bill enters the bar
reminding me of Caroline Mary
how she left me for him
God I've been lonely
since.
after all she promised me love and faithfulness openly
in front of others
saying she was dedicated to our future
using forever words
I'm getting used to the loneliness
but I can't get over the results
results that can't be avoided when love
becomes history
and one's soul is devoured by the heart
seeking more than just being a pump
cursing the wrong life serves up
leaving a living corpse cold with reality....
Is is so wrong to want love closure??
Thank you God for giving us love
but why can't your creations
live by the morals you created to make love special,
a sanctuary for peace of mind
with family roots spreading through all of mankind
a home for tenderness despite the imperfections
that make us wanting.........
imperfections that
responsible lovers bridge in loving recognition
I can't understand why I have to be a storage container
holding a tortured past.
out of the entire affair
it was me totally without doubt,
in innocence......yes, innocence!
Don't tell me this is the GD 21st.century!
Did someone change the makeup of the heart?
If so, I don't want it!
Send my heart to hell and let it burn with
Caroline Mary's
Then she'll have to accept the responsibility
of recklessly HURTING SOMEONE!

© Copyright 2006 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2006-01-02 09:35 AM


ethome
Hey my friend it always takes two to tango
and two to fandango. You will dance again my friend. Beautiful write.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

2 posted 2006-01-02 02:18 PM


sighing

to say "I feel your pain" is said so often now it loses meaning--

but these lines here:

"I'm getting used to the loneliness
but I can't get over the results"

(someone once told me that I keep looking for answers to things that weren't questions and I can't seem to forget him telling me THAT either)

and this:

"I can't understand why I have to be a storage container
holding a tortured past."

(nodding again here, I feel like one of those commercials that depict cheap garbage bags--I need a HEFTY bag for my heart debris--blush)

and finally with this:

"Send my heart to hell and let it burn with
Caroline Mary's
Then she'll have to accept the responsibility
of recklessly HURTING SOMEONE!"

(my idea of Hell is something along the lines of being made to feel all the pain that I caused others.... --how do you apologize for that?)

*heart-hugs* my sweet friend

May the new year hold as much joy as you have given to others.

If it does? You will need a hefty bag for the bliss!



Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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3 posted 2006-01-02 02:23 PM


Eric

I wish you love again, the forever kind!  

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2006-01-02 03:10 PM


Eric?

C'mere....

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time
5 posted 2006-01-02 05:07 PM


No

Your heart is needed for your words no matter what

Too easy to bay at the moon for too long

Too easy to find the wrong way

Too easy to take the easy way

And we all do it

Excellent words from you as usual

Dave

Magnus
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6 posted 2006-01-02 06:12 PM


Eric...very vivid,  very real...so real, I
am hoping it is more fiction than fact...

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
7 posted 2006-01-02 06:22 PM


"Don't tell me this is the GD 21st.century!" ~ IWTIHWT (I wish that I had written that! ~ and said it many a time!)

A powerful piece of solar-plexus-punching poetry!


Linda
May the new year be as kind to you as you are to others!



littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
8 posted 2006-01-03 05:33 AM


No, it isn't wrong and this is so very close to home, I am sorry.

I can't get over the results
results that can't be avoided when love
becomes history
and one's soul is devoured by the heart
seeking more than just being a pump
cursing the wrong life serves up
leaving a living corpse cold with reality....
Is is so wrong to want love closure??


tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
9 posted 2006-01-03 05:44 AM


~hugs~

Eric,
I don't think anyone fully recovers from what you are going through, you get on with life, move on and find someone new but the hurt and the damage stays with you forever...the best thing is to forgive but this comes only in time and when you are ready, it took me alot of years to forgive and now that I've done so I feel peace and freedom.
I hope you find peace soon, take care

~hugs~
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
10 posted 2006-01-03 07:11 AM


quote:
holding a tortured past.
out of the entire affair
it was me totally without doubt,
in innocence......yes, innocence!


Rediscover the innocence and leave the torture in the past. It sounds easy I know, but it isn't, still it CAN BE DONE.

This is the time to begin anew, to look and walk ahead.

Powerful poem, painful in its intensity.

Love,
Margherita



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