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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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do you hear the morning trickling down the windowpane that tricky morning don't be in such a hurry you might turn into the pavement you walk upon and then we'll see who's used more listen and you might hear your footsteps in the hall are you walking somewhere or away from someone I'll leave my impression on your bed while your shoes wear themselves out you wouldn't want to be late for that life you've been waiting for don't you hear it calling your name don't you hear it calling your bluff busy, busy, busy
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
just the right amount of bite to it without boiling over into a bitter rant..nice work |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
I liked this very much, agreeing with aenimal. ~hugs~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Jeep Monkey Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 96Chaos |
Chaos. I'm afraid many choose chaos. I like this very much. Happy New Year to you, too! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Edgy ~ yet not bitchy! There are several uniquely cool lines in this bit of a controlled rant! Good job! May 2006 be a wonderful year for you and your loved ones!  EA P.S. ~ and please don't forget to INHALE as well as exhale! I know I tend to stop breathing whenever I get upset! lol |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
I'll leave my impression on your bed while your shoes wear themselves out Very impressive work here these lines convey such a sad reality we all live |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
I'll leave my impression on your bed while your shoes wear themselves out Very impressive work here these lines convey such a sad reality we all live |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
this is amazing, thick with insight. it is perfect. don't be in such a hurry you might turn into the pavement you walk upon and then we'll see who's used more |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
oh darn it littlewing stole my quote! too bad. I'm writing it too... "don't be in such a hurry you might turn into the pavement you walk upon and then we'll see who's used more" perfect. xx farewell the ash-tray girl |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
What Raph said... perfect. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very cleaver enjoyed reading |
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