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In Dancing Sun
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In Dancing Sun |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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In Dancing Sun Take the rays that spark one’s morn and keep them till they touch the horn of plenty… Amid the dew of dawning glance, hem the sound but hark the dance, for it touches hem of moonsong… Let the stars of night sound forth, then stay the time of sun’s draw north, as it draws some east to western rivers Hurry up the tide of sound and stay till up the mountain rounds, and hold it till the moss part sings This is but the nature’s call to whim with one who whims us all, when ice fords all that come till spring… this is just the living thing… the woman… the wife…. the mother… life. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
In this one line: this is just the living thing… You said everything, Kari. especially adding . . . the just . . . I love this . . . its beautiful and speaks truth, about nature and woman. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
this IS beautiful but I am chuckling here at the hint of ice, our ford... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sue? you noticed.... just so.... Kacy? just so... and a belated yes....  to you both. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
A beautiful piece of work. for it touches hem of moonsong…" Outstanding lines. Stopped me in my tracks. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Your writing continues to and I believe will always, thrill me. hugs, Chrislane |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, yes - "the living thing" - one day it might have a lot to answer for.  Lovely write! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie "Hurry up the tide of sound and stay till up the mountain rounds, and hold it till the moss part sings This is but the nature’s call to whim with one who whims us all, when ice fords all that come till spring…" I have heard this song before, but never as lovely!!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
the woman, the wife, the mother. Yes! Beautiful, SIL! Library clicked! Happy New Year, dear friend! .....jo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
somehow I know her and my eyes are closed but my hands read her voice on the seams of the rivers enjoyed this ms |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
you don't mind if I save this, right? It whispered to me through the fields of wild flowers and corn....where I grew up. Wonderful weaving Karilea. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Wonderful...as always Sunshine. & It speaks of the rays of the sun...!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"when ice fords all that come till spring…" Not sure if this was intended as a clever play on words for one of our favorite poets here, but I enjoyed it as that anyhow.   |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write Karilea...simply amazing. Love this.. Love you lady~ Happy New Year Hip-Sis. In the midst of winter, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Loverly! Just loverly! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"this is just the living thing…" Beautiful write. JL |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
I just sat a while after reading this.. Thinking of something to say that would come close to explaining how this poem made me feel.... Going down the stanzas, letting the beauty of the language arrangement get me high- Thinking how at home I found myself, in the story in the lines... But the last few lines...hit me in the heart...and right between the eyes... "this is just the living thing… the woman… the wife…. the mother… life." That-is what I try to say in all of my poems...but never better than that... Thank you Kari... ____________ice/ford ><> [This message has been edited by ice (12-31-2005 06:45 AM).] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
as always a beautiful write, awesome flow and imagery...enjoyed! ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
what a sweet poem... smile from Neeraja! |
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