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Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

0 posted 2005-12-17 02:26 AM

A foul wind blows
As alone the old man sits
Contemplating
Wondering
Lost in the supposition
That his past was healthy
For himself
And those who surrounded
Tears in their eyes
Stinging with the pain of his actions
As he sits
Surrounded by the consequence
His actions have brought unto him
He vows to himself
To all who might hear
Never again
Till the end of his days
Will he have beans for lunch

no... I am not doing any illegal substances...lol

"...and as we drift along, I never fail to be astounded by the things we'll do for promises..."
Ronnie James Dio

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2005-12-17 05:11 AM

Brilliant! Especially the last lines, which, if I interpret them correctly, are saying that he doesn't see the reality of his actions. A very sad poem, but superbly executed.

- Owl

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2005-12-17 10:40 AM

I will have to dispute that VERY last quote. This was endearing . . . I thought you were talking about your past and could relate.

Until the beans.

No wonder you are in that doghouse!

Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

3 posted 2005-12-17 11:53 AM

Owl- Thanks for replying. I leave the interpretation up to you... THAT is what poetry is truly about.

Sue- OK... maybe a few slightly questionable substances.... lol Thanks for the read. It is always appreciated.

"...and as we drift along, I never fail to be astounded by the things we'll do for promises..."
Ronnie James Dio

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2005-12-20 10:30 AM

Much enjoyed Ringo, happy holidays to you!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2005-12-20 10:53 AM

*smile*

I love how you took this and led me down the path of melodrama, and then just like an unexpected fart, you made me get over m'self.

chuckling here

You get a kiss for that.

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