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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Dusk It comes so suddenly right after mauve someone dumps charcoal into it and stirs until just a small sun slips cool into night |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You DO have a way with words. But, then, you always have. That's why I read all you write  Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooooo cute and artistic, sweet friend, it had me envisioning a tiny smiling speck of yellow tucking itself in sheets of glossy ebony, yay! (giggles) This is beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dusk catches a moment's green eye glimpsed into tomorrow and falls silent into a shroud of dreams come to be... true.  . |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MyMartieSis~ Prettier than pretty ...~ Just as you are~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
PartyMartie... Love the way you made what is...very cool! |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
it's like i could see it and feel it all at once. beautiful. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord, I have no idea how you do this, Martie, but please never stop. You handed me a canvass there, Lady. I love your px too, its beautiful, perfect. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
a true visionary My spirit will rise |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Martie... Perfect imagery. Hugs~Nancy |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Lovely, Martie. I'd like to slip cool into night as well - just can't find the charcoal. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, this is such an interesting poem. Thank you for sharing your brilliant thoughts of your mind with us. Hugs, Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Soooo bootiful Martie.. I wish i had written this. Sigh mxx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
and then comes the dark? enjoyed you here neighbor lady D |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 Hugs & Blessings ~ Chris |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
ohhhh Martie, this was richness to a degree that feels...lovely picture as well, mysterious, haunting but in a very delectable way.....your words are and always will be like the sound of a baby grande... Hugs and love sent your way |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie ... a beautiful painting. Bob |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This taste makes me want to hear more.....there's much said within this little gem, and just between thee and me, I think it's the start of something much larger. I can't wait to find out! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I hope you're right, Ed...I've been on the lookout for words, as you know...I'll keep up the good search! Thank you friends, for replying! To Keep up the Good Search To begin on white with some lopsided twisted thought a calypso from the past perhaps or the rock where I stubbed my toe it is all like chicken scratches numbering my thoughts click click faster now they come like black birds winged and mighty and dark dark they sing across my la la la in sharps that pierce my naked longing and they discord too rumble like the far left of piano thunder trouble sad sound and I listen as if to pick out a melody that would explain but I cannot tell you of dark hair or of scarlet wishes cannot march you into my cadence so you can keep time how can you keep time I have been trying but my poem slips and I am off in circles again falling into rivers even the waterfall hears me coming and winks with sunlight for the joy of tossing me about Gentle is the wander when I float on wings of garden roses and prick my skin to feel the sun fill up all my surfaces with surprise and then today I lost my count and I whispered to the soft air where where is my lost thought and it lay me down again on this white page where I have clicked my life and said someday you will see but for now you must keep up the good search. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
What a wonderful word picture, Martie! ....jo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Yup, COOL! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
wonderful Martie - Paul |
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Brian James Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 147Winnipeg |
Hi Martie, There's always a lot of impressionism in your poetry. At its best, the level of honesty lets you put across some wonderful perspective. Especially powerful here is your use of the word "someone," and the visual of "just a small sun" (as it would appear). I have to wonder, do you paint? Your writing makes it seem like you have the eyes of Claude Monet. Always a pleasure to read you. This goes into my library. Brian |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
youve captured it well, beauty and grace, trademarks of a martie original |
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