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0 posted 2005-12-02 07:19 PM


Stars In The Grass

There were stars in the grass that night
and the earth warmth of an Indian Summer
still hovered to the depth of a dandelion stem
beneath a sky sparkling with an early frost.

I picked one of each, a promising star and
a single bloom my fingers found for me,
wished on both and said the words
we both knew without any saying.

You rose trembling and fled, unable to respond
though your eyes said “yes” clear as moonlight.
I lay there for a time I can’t measure now,
content with a flower, one star, and a promise.

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (12-04-2005 09:53 AM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2005-12-02 07:28 PM


Ed

I sure hope that your wish comes true!!  

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2 posted 2005-12-02 08:15 PM


Beautiful....absolutely beautiful!!
You have been writing some amazing words lately.
Write on...please keep the pen on the paper.
Hugs~N.

~Let peace begin with me...

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3 posted 2005-12-03 10:52 PM


i like how you fingerpainted stars along the grass here
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4 posted 2005-12-03 10:55 PM


Ed~
This is as beautiful a blessing as I've read~
May all your wishes come true~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email -       noles1@totcon.com       

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5 posted 2005-12-03 11:24 PM


You just might say they did....one month ago, our 35th anniversary....

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6 posted 2005-12-03 11:29 PM


Enjoyed Ratleader, and I admire a man able to show the tenderness you often do. Your a great poet!
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7 posted 2005-12-04 12:37 PM


absolutely beautiful ed
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8 posted 2005-12-04 01:05 AM


Yes, a beautiful write and how lovely when a promise is honoured.  Thirty-five years!  Congratulations!
Helen

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9 posted 2005-12-04 09:35 AM


Oh my goodness Ed. This is simply divine.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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10 posted 2005-12-04 05:59 PM


This would be incredibly beautiful even if it was simply written from imagination.... that it is truth... and that the promise has been fulfilled so magnificently... just adds to the impact of your words. *S*

Absolutely lovely!!

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11 posted 2005-12-05 08:37 AM


I have come back to read this many times, and each took me further to a magnificent meadow.
All blessings Ed.
TD

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12 posted 2005-12-05 10:54 AM


Well said. Great little poem.
Peace,
bgj

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13 posted 2005-12-05 08:48 PM


Ed,

   Another great poem to add to my collection!     The pictures you draw with such ease!   Your poetry touches so many senses!

miscellanea

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14 posted 2005-12-06 03:06 AM


Nice writing...James
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15 posted 2005-12-06 06:05 AM


Ed
Romance without mush..Nature sure gives us plenty of comparative subject matter to work with- but only few can grasp its similes and put them to poetry this well..

Enjoyed
___________ice
   ><>

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16 posted 2005-12-06 09:13 AM


Ed?  Whoa, the ending was spectacular, humble and allowing...loved this and your perspective, words, poems...beautiful!
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17 posted 2005-12-06 10:42 AM



I do believe that the loss of your techno piece (that you had mentioned in one of your replies to me), has not been as great a loss as it could have been! For thou dost write with an especially soft touch with thy new-found quill!


Linda

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18 posted 2005-12-06 04:38 PM


Beautiful and congratulations on 35 years!

- Owl

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19 posted 2005-12-06 06:24 PM


Beautiful - and congratulations!

- Owl

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20 posted 2005-12-07 03:49 AM


well done master longtail.

-majnu
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21 posted 2005-12-07 06:17 AM


What a wonderful thought, Ed. I love looking
up at the stars in the velvet of night,
especially with my Honey-Love.
Hugs,
Ethel

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22 posted 2005-12-07 09:08 AM


aww Ed, I have not read in you in so long and that is a shame, I do apologize for that but this?

Gosh, left me with a pull in my chest.

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23 posted 2005-12-07 09:42 AM


Very sweetly written.  

Thanks for the smile Ed.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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24 posted 2005-12-07 08:49 PM


Well aren't you just a died in the wool" romantic. I'm always a sucker for that. I really liked this. Very well done.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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25 posted 2005-12-08 12:30 PM


Ratleader,
loved this from the start to the finish.
Left me star...gazing!
Great job!
pictureme2

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26 posted 2005-12-08 02:35 AM


Ed, this is fabulous.  I could envision the scene....stars in the grass....just lovely!  Clicking the library!   ....jo
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27 posted 2005-12-08 10:32 AM


gotta smile @larryc, but just absolutely love this.......wow
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28 posted 2005-12-08 09:09 PM


These words from your heart show that you are still choosing the right star and a blossom that fills your heart with joy...Congradulations on your 35th...**big hugs**
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