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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-12-02 12:00 PM




A badge of pain
she wears, and wakes
the virgin white,
alive,with crimson words
off splattered ink,
she stands,
a leafless tree
in full disclosure
to her maker
in her stance of grace,
her battered branches
whip the sky's veil
off its pious face,
she sheds of sweetness
to the audience,
of her sufferage,
then smiles
when shadows sink
beyond the sun
that takes its nightly sleep,
she winks,
and walks
the martyr's aisle,
with the others
flipping birds,
and laughing wildly
at their given fate.



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iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
1 posted 2005-12-02 12:58 PM


Michele, you never cease to capture me.  Maybe, it's because I love trees so.  No, it's the WAY your write of nature.  Your analogy in this poem rings bells for me.  To me, there is one tree (in particular) that  represent my own soul in a way... or rather, the aspiring of my soul.  I've got a tree poem, I'll post someday and dedicate it to you when I do.  I wrote it when I was 17...after a tree stole my heart.  I would drive for miles just to sit there on the side of the road and gaze upon it.  I still think of that tree, which I dubbed, "my tree," and wonder if it still grows solitary out in that field.   .....jo
Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
2 posted 2005-12-02 01:41 AM


one of the best i've read on these pages, or anywhere for that matter
bklynboy
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since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
3 posted 2005-12-03 02:25 AM


Interesting.....verrrry interesting
MGROVES
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california
4 posted 2005-12-03 05:37 AM


nice

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
5 posted 2005-12-03 10:44 AM


Excellent Michele...
Your imagery is wonderful.
Hugs~Nancy

~Let peace begin with me...

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
6 posted 2005-12-03 12:08 PM


what Raph said...


  No one writes them like you.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

7 posted 2005-12-03 01:16 PM


I am confounded but smiling here.

Y'see, I have been working on something for some time which used one of my favorite historical persons as a metaphor--

Elizabeth, The Virgin Queen
http://ise.uvic.ca/Library/SLT/history/virgin.html

and now, you have written quite succintly all that I was hoping to convey.

Since I can't possibly say it any better, pardon me while I go yank a few pages out of my marble notebook.


Angelheart
Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754
Jacksonville,FL USA
8 posted 2005-12-03 01:18 PM


nice write, thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry!!

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

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