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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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It's assumed he was bewitched Legends blame the siren song but I think it's simply this he knew exactly what he did and all my wishes different will never right the wrong. I am ashamed I must admit-- I, with my experience, He was not my first and this most likely, not my last regret and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sometimes I am grateful, for finally forgetting certain things K... loved the musings from your pen today Hon. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, I enjoyed reading this from your heart. It's so true that time doesn't always heal.... just makes the remembering a little easier... at times, anyway. Thanks for sharing today, sweet lady. Hugs, Ethel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"He was not my first and this most likely, not my last regret and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget." Damn Karen...IWIHWT!!! 'Cause I know what you mean exactly! Love ya lady~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Sensitive and empathetic. An unusual angle. Usually it is the love-lorn partner who is moved to poetry. I enjoyed this very much. - Owl |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
don't believe i've ever forgotten but I can forgive, long as there's a great distance between us.... love your style lady jane!!!! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh Karen!! love it!! and understand it very well..  lady!"too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
*sigh*  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I don't think you forget . . . I think maybe you just live . . . *smile* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I think of him now, as nothing more or less than a flame in pain ... burdened with voices in his head and an ache he couldnt fill (or so he claimed) Muses are a dime a dozen here and it seems he wrote them all. Moths can be deaf, dumb and blind, even when the writing is on the wall. Truths blur between the lines, reminders of regret in rhyme ... And I might have loved him once, but always knew moths cant compete with the butterflies ... Sometimes they write the words so well, we forget poetry can be nothing more than pretty lies. (yktiktykik)  Thru the water...thru the rain To the soul of everything Throw my heart out on the stones And I'm almost gone D.Gray |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
i was singing the title to the tune of six months on a leaky boat by the split endz, of course no one else remembers that song so i'll shut up now. as per our discussions, you know i've had my share of people like this..hugs you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget." See there, those dead brains cells do come in handy at times...  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 our puppy said it for me let the boat sail quietly away |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This one needs to be set to music, I am not kidding, Karen. There is a haunting tune underying those well chosen words. And that title -- I can envision an album cover! *hugs*....jojo |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"He was not my first and this most likely, not my last regret and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget." These ending words anchor the poem safely in the harbor that protects good poetry from the storms of mediocre verse found elswhere on the net..a reason why I have made pip my poetry home... enjoyed ----------ice ><> |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
~you never ever cease to amaze me~ feeling your thoughts~ ~baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
oh, how blessed we are with 'forget' and with your words..... this is powerful k |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
*chuckling at your "critique" message* Serenity, in this instance, what YOU say bounces off and sticks to me somewhere in my past... hit me guts, it did... excellent! ~tier  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you I almost titled this "whatever floats your boat" but I thought better of it, as I wanted to add the ephemeral, fragility quality of paper on water. I do appreciate you all reading, and hugs for the understanding. I leave you with instructions, in case you have a hankering to follow suit: http://www.mathematische-basteleien.de/paper_ship.htm And then, as Kacy suggested, you just let it go... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen...WOW another one of those I will not forget...Paul The title... Threw me for a loop cause it didn't sound like you. The poem...100% you How you manage to say what you do in that special way still amazes me. The reaction...Just wanting to cry and wish it away for you. Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wax the paper... watch it float... fill it with tears... there goes your boat... serenity? don't ever stop writing! |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such eternally true thoughts, so well expressed. Like Karilea says, don't every stop. Ken |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
forget what? it never happened..... right on write kicking the white |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
He was not my first and this most likely, not my last regret and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget. love this! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Just because I wanted to."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I am ashamed I must admit-- I, with my experience, He was not my first and this most likely, not my last regret and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget. it's just that i forget it's just that i forget speaks volumes m'ladym xx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
It's assumed he was bewitched Legends blame the siren song but I think it's simply this he knew exactly what he did and all my wishes different will never right the wrong. I am ashamed I must admit-- I, with my experience, He was not my first and this most likely, not my last regret and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget. Serenity, Hm... I bet a lot can relate to this! I know I sure can! I love the versatility you show in your writing. When I open one of your posts, I never know what to expect other than sheer excellence! miscellanea |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I almost titled this "whatever floats your boat" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I was thinking "loose lips sink ships" I wanted to add the ephemeral, fragility quality of paper on water. Through the water Through the rain To the soul of everything Wash my heart out on the stones And I'm almost gone David Gray I loved the link you left for the paper boat next time I go to the river...I'll release two of them. (ykikyk) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
and this most likely, not my last regret and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget. taking this with me today~~ M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Jan? I want copies before you release those boats. Heh. She thinks she is gonna tease me like that and not let me in on it? Call me girlie! and a curtsey and hug to you all |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"and time it doesn't heal, I say - it's just that I forget." Ain't that the truth?... Some things?.. I wish I could forget... and that paper boat page?... yep... think I need to make me one of those too... *smile* Love ya, lady... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I enjoyed this. guilt is a little bugger isn't it? -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...and in my case, it was just that I wanted to forget...James |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
totally understand My spirit will rise |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ah, yes! By releasing boats (that no longer are for your higher good) to float freely downstream, ensures your serenity, Serene One.  You are a multi-faceted poetess! ~ and woman. Linda |
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