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Unrefined.
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Unrefined. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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I do not know where the words came from, or how they managed to escape the cool grasp of my lips, so tenderly bound.. I do not know why I say what I say in such tones that never quite suit your ears, or why they occasionally crawl from languid places, dark insane captivity, but they are merely words.. I know why you comfort me now, crossing my boundries and marking my territory as unrefined. My trying times have measured up to nothing, with you, I have no excuse. My rough hands and broken skin show that I have nothing to prove and no reason to justify my tears to you..but birds do not cry, they sing in spite of their sorrow, I have plenty of tomorrows to grow a new heart. I cannot let the sadness define me.. only the strength you stole. it is still mine.. . . . I don't know why the words never seem to clarify the fact that I am unrefined.. and feel not a single shred of guilt because of it. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
..but birds do not cry, they sing in spite of their sorrow, I have plenty of tomorrows to grow a new heart. I cannot let the sadness define me.. only the strength you stole. it is still mine.. It sure is and in a very refinely held state. My, this was heart wrenching, but through to the end there is a visible tenacity and strength. Well done Meg. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"My rough hands and broken skin show that I have nothing to prove and no reason to justify my tears to you..but birds do not cry, they sing in spite of their sorrow, I have plenty of tomorrows to grow a new heart." Your "singing" is complex and exquisite, Kaoru.  ....jo |
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bgj Member
since 2005-11-09
Posts 128Ga. USA |
A sad and very beautiful write. I enjoyed this very much. Peace, bgj |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"birds do not cry, they sing in spite of their sorrow, I have plenty of tomorrows to grow a new heart." ~ Keep that thought, Meg! It's a good one! You certainly do have a marvelous way of expressing yourself! Your strength has not been lost in the sadness! Hugs with love, Linda |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
one thing i l#ve about you, you complain to me you can't write or hateyour writing..then you blow everybody away with a piece like this. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
reading you is like sitting back and watching myself, in the earlier stage of my life...I love what you do, how you think and feel, then...how you place it on paper, just so honest...there is no 2nd guessing with you gal..and thats why your poetry, to me, is so so good! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
unrefined....? An odd notion, indeed If this is the product Poet and poem alike belie it |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
unrefined looks good to me, gives it more bite and grit, more heart, life lived....all that jazz.....i relate...... good butt kickin poetry |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I do not know why I say what I say in such tones that never quite suit your ears  or why they occasionally crawl from languid places, dark insane captivity, but they are merely words.. I will never, never tire of reading you. This part sounded so familiar to me, and you wrote it so perfectly. I have wondered those things myself meg, and its baffling. Write moooooore! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is utter beaty, Meg and good for you: but birds do not cry, they sing in spite of their sorrow, I have plenty of tomorrows to grow a new heart. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I do not know why I say what I say in such tones that never quite suit your ears, or why they occasionally crawl from languid places, dark insane captivity, but they are merely words.." Reminds me of when I was married and when I would reach my breaking point the most hideous things would spew from my mouth...I felt bad that I was capable of it yet not bad that I had done it towards him... "I have nothing to prove and no reason to justify my tears to you" Took me decades to understand that...I wasted so much time trying to make someone understand me. "I don't know why the words never seem to clarify the fact that I am unrefined.. and feel not a single shred of guilt because of it. I am not convinced that unrefined is a bad thing.  Meg, this is, of course, a master piece with it's message... I am keeping it.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Bravo! Another great one Kaoru. I sure like that last line. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
birds do not cry, they sing in spite of their sorrow, I have plenty of tomorrows to grow a new heart. You always move me. Library m xx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
The sadness, yet over coming strength, leaves me without the right words to tell you how this has touched me. Excellently expressed misc |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa |
I read your poem, I read the replies, and agreed with just about everything that was said. ~ Enjoyed this one, for sure. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
you are so good at this Meg, this collapsed me.  |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
This is awesome! I feel you on this......just having one of them days. Big hugs to you |
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