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lucky
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0 posted 2005-11-16 08:42 PM


aching rivers



the blood of affliction falls on Terra's
open pores aching rivers creep far below the
surface along fault lines until they find her heart
where they hang around to form icicle shaped
deposits dripping dripping ever dripping
spouts of pain from stalactites
into colored pools of
oiled regret
forming
stone
pillers
while it’s
too late for
her ever returning
her eyelids half closed
with succumb jaded from the

lack of comprehension being tossed
from tranquility and parked on gutters
edge where exposed and powerless
she dozes as mine own heart
wept cold dark rivers
aching



     Written for my friend this morning when his wife popped over to his house with another man. I knew something wasn’t quite right when he called as he wanted to buy a beer. He had his little girl with him, you could see lines where fresh tears had run on both their faces. She was hard trying to be heroine holding back the other tears. She must be at least nine or ten now. Few words were spoken, what comfort could be shared or said, and an “I’m Sorry” just doesn’t seem to cut it. Her name is Terra. Perhaps a small prayer for her and her younger sister.
2005/11/16Wed. 3:42 Am.




Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again...
~Rosemary J. Gwaltney~

[This message has been edited by lucky (11-17-2005 12:15 AM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2005-11-16 10:44 PM


Hey brother!  You have such a compassionate heart...take care of it!  
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2005-11-17 11:16 AM


OhLucky~
How very thoughtful you are ... and have always been~

This is beautifully poignant~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

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Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2005-12-06 11:33 AM



~ing the kindness and beauty of you~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

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4 posted 2005-12-18 04:39 AM


My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

OwlSA
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5 posted 2005-12-18 06:34 AM


A beautiful poem from a beautiful soul!  Heartfelt prayers for Terra and her sister and father and for you in your pain about the situation as well.  I love the stalactite-shaped form - so sensitively fashioned, just before the tip of it drips.

- Owl
Just quietly want to mention a spelling error - "pillers" should be "pillars".

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6 posted 2005-12-18 07:17 AM


very sad how little regard some have for whom they hurt...

M

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