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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-11-16 08:09 AM


you are the welcoming dirge
fair winter, in your gown of sound
with the noise of your knees in stride
slapping the leather sides
of a big boned stallion sky

candy cones are your stones
when the gasping winds pray
when the tears of trees are rainless
and there are only rivers
in the yawned dawn of sandstorms

and tomorrow, in your velvet
you are a penniless dancer
giving billow to empty skin ends
as you spin your promises
as topless tea pot whispers

what god's will gives me strength
to be the summered statue
armless in my imagination and
surrounded by the bathing waters
of scheol's slow frozen tundra

fair winter you arouse my suffocation


_____________

daark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (11-16-2005 09:08 AM).]

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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-11-16 08:17 AM


this was absolutely mystic with sensi sounds....very much enjoyed....and one of my favs of yours...beautiful....emmmm, emmm, beautiful!
Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

2 posted 2005-11-16 08:54 AM


God I have missed reading you m'friend,
and this is the perfect example of why...

perfection babe, pure perfection.  big smiles and hugs coming atcha!

SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
3 posted 2005-11-16 10:54 AM


you make such beautiful things, so effortlessly.... really liked this D.
bgj
Member
since 2005-11-09
Posts 128
Ga. USA
4 posted 2005-11-16 11:28 AM


I really like this -

"you are the welcoming dirge
fair winter, in your gown of sound
with the noise of your knees in stride
slapping the leather sides
of a big boned stallion sky"

Awesome write. Powerful. Lots of luck,
bgj



OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
5 posted 2005-11-17 01:16 PM


What a wonderful way to deal with a really hot summer - to write a poem to winter!  I loved your images - I savoured them one by one.

- Owl

Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
6 posted 2005-11-17 01:19 PM



Fair winter...
fog shrouded...
summer's whisper
upon the shore...

more, please.

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