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LeeJ
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0 posted 2005-11-16 07:25 AM


like a revolving sales team
everything was still cooking

yes,
my hero coexisting
in the world of my fancies...
he was
like walking out of a mirage
of heat rising off blacktop

but then,
my assailant overpowered me
with deep concentration
cut short my already limited life...

and i waited for some sign of approval
yoked together with a giant wave of consciousness
somehow knowing we’d be together again
he and I…someday

tossed in a storm angry noise of his desperate terror
he would crouch in his corner trembling
like i did, before he took my life, before he drained
every last hue of breath from my limp body...

but for now…

like late summer becoming a daily affair
my wardrobe consisted of womanhood
tripping over words with long strides
which could only be spoken, as children
were born...

i stood gazing out the window of my heaven
growing, like everything was preplanned...
looking into
great pools of blue water, imagining
what i would look like
what i had looked like in former life?

inhaling fragrant honey, which was tip toeing
like proud parents into the surprise of
my voices feet...
laying foundations tossed
with stones of fair colors, enjoying the privacy
of this public transportation, that would soon
carry me against my will…back…to that soft
light of birth…

great generations with family names exploding
into my mouth…like a death sentence

i didn’t want to go…i didn’t want to hear
those names echo in my ears, like a commandment
filling my dreams with great sorrow, knowing what
it was like to touch a previous day…knowing the intensity
of life, and it’s heavy bed…

i would have to leave, when the sun announced
a new day….
i would have to fill the air with my presence
being placed on the crammed filled world
which to me, was
like a crowded train station….

but, i would claim every promise in the bonds of
adverse suffering, that my ancestors accounted for
perhaps as a child
perhaps as a daughter’s silent plea
perhaps claiming love and affection
but, somehow, i knew,
this time,
i’d leap into
all the dark clouds of the world

and this time, every passing minute would be
valuable…

this time, i’d remember a flash of light
god’s voice in the deepest thunder the world had
ever heard
saying good riddance to black nights
knowing where the moon’s light shone the brightest
this time, my voice would be heard
like the sounds of waves on a beach

and rooted bitterness would be something despised

my words would hasten like inspired wings of doves
wandering off in some wilderness of heartfelt song…
pointing to the raised eyebrow of horizons
and there, my birthday would be continued on the next page

i’d forgive my assailants of past lives

if ,
i could only remember the small bows of quiet moments
the beautiful fountains of morning light shining
as joy comes in the morning, forgetting the nights
of darkness…


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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2005-11-16 09:47 AM


LeeJ
Yes each one seems different but are they?
Enjoyed the read. Good morning sweet.

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
2 posted 2005-11-16 09:55 AM


Lee~
I'll be coming back to this one~

Finding so much to ponder~

'if ,
i could only remember the small bows of quiet moments
the beautiful fountains of morning light shining'


The if's of my life are sometimes where I need to be~
So, I indulge myself~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

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just out of reach
3 posted 2005-11-16 09:59 AM


Lee, I have had this Alice Sebold book in my little library nook for over a year now ... forgotten all about it until this moment. Thankyou for this wonderful write and quiet nudge. hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

miscellanea
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OH
4 posted 2005-11-16 10:01 PM


Lee,
   Love the way you conjure up images one after another!  These lines really caught my focus.  After I copied them, I realized I could have easily copied it in its entirity!
It's great to read your poetry again!
          
   'like late summer becoming a daily affair
my wardrobe consisted of womanhood
tripping over words with long strides'

Enjoyed,
miscellanea

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