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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2005-11-13 07:46 PM

He rode the trails and sought the grails,
from here to there he went.

A hearty soul upon a stroll
who never would relent.

His goal to seek a maiden sleek
upon the village green.

And then to ride a moonlit glide,
her hair a raven’s sheen.

They slew a beast before their feast
beside the roaring fire.

And then they sought what each had wrought
as passions fueled desire.

And when the night did chill so slight
they stayed upon one bed.

A man who caught the prize he sought
of raven's sheen...to wed!

To a lady whose words inspire...

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

1 posted 2005-11-13 08:03 PM

This is a wonderful story, Magnus. Thank you for sharing it. I enjoyed reading.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2005-11-13 08:05 PM

wow, this is a truly beautiful write!
and a keeper

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2005-11-13 11:12 PM

Oooh, this is really nice.
Good one Magnus my friend.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2005-11-14 05:40 PM

Enjoyed the read, Magnus.

CG

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2005-11-14 07:31 PM

OhMagnus~
You 'inspire' so graciously~
This is lovely~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email - noles1@totcon.com

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

6 posted 2005-11-14 08:33 PM

My Magnus, you never cease to amaze me. Try as I might, I can never keep the tempo to the end...while you, my friend, do it flawlessly each and every time.

When I grow up I want to be just like you!

Patricia

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2005-11-14 09:23 PM

Hi Barry

I like this kind of romantic tale....especially when you wrote it!!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

8 posted 2005-11-16 01:35 PM

Magnus, I have never come across this form before - with an internal rhyme in the first line of the couplet and then the second line of the couplet rhyming with the second line of the next couplet - I enjoyed it very much (as I did the content of the poem). Did you create it or is it a known one?

- Owl

bgj
Member

since 2005-11-09

Posts 128
Ga. USA

9 posted 2005-11-16 01:53 PM

Man this is really cool. Very different. Has a country-western feel to it. I enjoyed reading this a lot. Awesome write.
Peace,
bgj

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

10 posted 2005-11-22 09:40 AM

A lucky man is he, to seek and find. The only man luckier is the one who doesn't seek, and finds anyway!

....from here to where he went....here...to where he went....dang I like that line....why didn't I find it when I went a'seeking for my words?

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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

11 posted 2005-11-22 09:41 AM

Well done Barry!

Read like a romance novel..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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