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Emptied Hands |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Crumbled petals scattered north Abandoned swing upon a porch Within an empty window's stare No one there, no one there Forgotten notes in sing-song rhyme A steady beat but lost in time Paired hearts tied with gossamer lace Rests in some forsaken place In some forsaken place they die If not for ryhme then there go I So pen in hand, lost love's lament 'pon papyrus dry one's true intent Melodies play o'er long lost hills To twist inside the bitter still Born of womb, yet far too soon Exhaled aloft sweet crescent moon ~tier  |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
impressive style ... i will be sure to take notes from you : ) ~wolfman |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSisterTiersdin~ One could quite literally *sigh* through the all of this~ Laced so delicately elegant ... as you are prone to pen~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW! to my library. m xx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A most enjoyable read - thanks! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) This is sooooooo beautiful and the imagery soooooo soulful, sweet friend, every old, abandoned house indeed has such a story that longs to be heard and so many stories of legendary love or lost love within each home always feels to me like millions of romance novels and dramas waiting to happen! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Tier~ your pen has such a delicate touch.. love this keeper...indeed. hugs~Nancy Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"If not for ryhme then there go I" smile This rhyme thing? Even in free verse, I can't seem to help it. it's like that empty porch swing creaking rhythm in the wind--I hear music everywhere. Love to ya teirs... this was elegant m'love. and tight too. Not easily accomplished but you have finesse. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
'pon papyrus dry one's true intent ~*~ my love of pen to ink drew me to perform an act of... respect when it came to a grade school project to study, explore, and write about something that still had use in today's world, some 4o+ years ago.... I looked back on antiquity, and decided to write of how paper came to be.... all the way back to papyrus... Thank you, Tier.... for bringing back to me this fond memory. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
beautifully written... Especially nice when read aloud. M |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Absolutely beautiful. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Thank you all for such wonderful comments and sentiments! come on, group hug! ~tier |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Tier.....exquisite piece! ....jo |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This, most worthy of a bump back up... simply because 'tis the season to jot down our notes to loved ones, family and friends... and this particular poem, brings to me the thought of leaving only our best behind... hugging you for this, Tier... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I am so very glad this came back up, this is way to excellent to have missed. Lovely write Tier! Happy holidays to you! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I do not know how I missed this, Tier papyrus dry one's true intent I adore this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 another library piece thanks for this gem |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
it sure helps to remember to click that library box LOL but its such a good write an immediate second visit is acceptable, isn't it? |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Crumbled petals scattered north Abandoned swing upon a porch Within an empty window's stare No one there, no one there Reel me in, why don't you!? Wow...I like the "No one there, no one there"...repetition, it is used so well here. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautiful flow and rhythm....well done Tier. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
What all those people up there said... Awfully nice, Tier! |
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