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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-10-29 03:42 PM



Out
On the back steps

Beyond the bins
Full of garbage—

The autumn leaves
Trembling

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-10-29 05:53 PM



Yes...

they
tremble
in anticipation

of the gaping
black bag.

Thank you, John.

Bodger
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2 posted 2005-10-29 06:18 PM


Awaiting a history

Just beginning

Dave

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3 posted 2005-10-29 06:31 PM


Yes, they tremble because they know they should be composted!
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4 posted 2005-10-29 10:22 PM


They're trembling because they are in the wrong bags!! At least in Ontario Canada ... clear bags only!! lol.
This is great John. Much enjoyed. Chris

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5 posted 2005-11-22 02:45 PM


Big pictures from tiny words...there's a name for that, I think....

...oh yeah, "poetry"......

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6 posted 2007-04-20 11:24 PM


how the poem is balanced

the positive....
1.out
2.beyond
3.The autumn leaves(bright color)

the negative...
1. back,
2. bins Full of garbage bin
3. Trembling

it is beautiful.

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