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LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296


0 posted 2005-10-26 08:49 AM


selective vision

Love me,
     until no shread of evidence remains
     and
     when our dancing days are done
     we’ll join the mist maiden,
     in her spring issue
     of true-after life determination,
     in that last garden of hope
     cutting our way to the heart of love

Where
    outside becomes an inside cappucino
     a place where cold cannot breach
    earth, our rocking chair, where yarns
    of come back home,
     becomes a rustic village
    wandering within our visions of winding paths
    we mold a rebirth of knowledge,
     days simmering
     air born birds...surpassingly swollen with plumage
     humming what we encountered before
     burned by the intimate womb of a consciousness place
     releasing another day
     another limb that aches
     you open the door
     to every house we’ve ever lived
     we love not the reasons, but listen where sensation resides
      deep within a dimension of love, passion and our deepest desires

There
    art stretches a world to our needs
    inspired by infinate reflections,
    more lovely then breathless eternity
   profound is our sense of faith
   weightier then life itself, save the curves
   you’ve touched on that ancient thicket
  of the core of our being, boundless requited love
   where dawn draws a life blood of magick
   pouring outward in a thousand lives
   each more thrilling then the quiet tears
   of awakening in a land of us…where
   love feels us in an absolute faultlessness
   radiant balance makes its way into
   everything that the mind, heart and eyes,
   have always searched for and known
   the flame in our hearts become a searing

threshold

   of one warmth bedazzled by life’s quest
   feeling a sound inside,
   bursting with words that whisper
   from our souls...every moment, every second
   led us to
   this
   ethereal existence
   and yes, my love
   every moment in life "is" worth it...


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ice
Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2005-10-26 09:07 AM



Love me,
     until no shread of evidence remains
Where
    outside becomes an inside cappucino
     a place where cold cannot breach
    earth
There
    art stretches a world to our needs
    inspired by infinate reflections,

....every moment led us to
   this ethereal existence and yes, my love
   every moment in life "is" worth it...

These words tie this poem together,
The ties that bind the inbetweens, are what I call "earth talk"

"earth talk"

" in that last garden of hope"
" a place where cold cannot breach-earth,"
"air born birds...surpassingly swollen with plumage
     humming what we encountered "
"art stretches a world to our needs
    inspired by infinate reflections"
" you’ve touched on that ancient thicket"
"quiet tears.. of awakening in a land of us"

I believe that "earth talk" manifests the soul, the invisible spirit
(in my mind) is made most effectively visible, by speaking in that type of poetic language...
You have used them well to get the human emotion points across.

That is why this poem is a very good one for me to read .....

------------ice
   ><>

babygirlwlove
Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180
New York City
2 posted 2005-10-26 09:15 AM


"Love me,
     until no shread of evidence remains"

wow...compelling read, my friend~


~baby

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
3 posted 2005-10-26 09:15 AM


Very well done!  Loved the last stanza most.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2005-10-26 11:38 AM


each more thrilling then the quiet tears
   of awakening in a land of us…


always so much depth to enjoy in your writings

M

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