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sweetwater
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Perth

0 posted 2005-10-21 02:31 AM



Pain

I've been kicked in the head and punched in the face
was cut with a knife and bled over the place
My ankle's been twisted and my eye has been black
my knees have been skinned, my skull has been cracked
My appendix exploded, my kidney got stones
my ribs have been fractured, I've broke a few bones
My back has been burnt, my finger's been ground
Try harder you bastards... I'm still around.

© Copyright 2005 Tash - All Rights Reserved
Constance
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since 2001-07-28
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1 posted 2005-10-21 03:02 AM


Wow sweetwater, what a wild ride!I really enjoyed it--- But ouch!

smiles,
Constance

Margherita
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Eternity
2 posted 2005-10-21 08:23 AM


Sounds to me as a masochistic challenge!

Tough write.

You no doubt stay your ground!

Love,
Margherita

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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3 posted 2005-10-21 06:14 PM


I felt so much determination and strength as I read your words.

Take care.....Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Balladeer
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4 posted 2005-10-21 10:33 PM


LOL! Gotta like a man who says it like it is! Reminds me of The Winner by Shel Silverstein - and that's a compliment!
JesusChristPose
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5 posted 2005-10-22 03:13 PM


For some reason, this poeme reminded me of the Steve McQueen character in Papillon when he is floating away on his raft and shouting, "I'm still here you bastards!"


Midnitesun
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Gaia
6 posted 2005-10-22 09:28 PM


Well, all I can offer is an aspirin and hope they DON'T try harder! ouch! but what a good venting write!
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