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icebox
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0 posted 2005-10-15 11:20 PM




...and now finally you understand
what never could be said,
until now
when words are wasted on the dead,
so many things go hand in hand
on life’s sad twisting trails
along the water’s edge of life
where sifting sand fills scales of justice
and grains of truth aren’t what you’d thought,
where beliefs for which you’d fought
and clutched too desperately
are less than shadows made by drifting smoke
blown in the wind;
thanks for the songbird singing
just outside my open door,
where it should have been afraid,
where it had never sung before,
come now to say you’re freed from pain;
funny that it made me sit and watch the time
to check how long it took
for my call to be made
to tell me you were gone.  
Our little secret,
your’s and mine,
now fades quietly in history
where it belongs,
where there are no reasons left to cry,
stored away with little quiet songs
thoughts sung by a startled bird,
in simple notes of last goodbye.

         ©2005 by icebox

[This message has been edited by icebox (10-16-2005 12:11 AM).]

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iliana
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1 posted 2005-10-15 11:33 PM


"and grains of truth aren’t what you’d thought,
where beliefs for which you’d fought
and clutched too desperately
are less than shadows made by drifting smoke"

Especially liked these lines, Mr. C. You are such a generous writer and your gifts are much esteemed.   ....jo

When I first read the title, I thought of the song..."Goodnight Irene."  Can't remember all the words I heard in my childhood, but it was something about "Goodnight Irene. I'll see you in my dreams," I think.  

Martie
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2 posted 2005-10-15 11:52 PM


Icebox

"and now finally you understand
what never could be said,
until now
when words are wasted on the dead,"

So often this is true, and I know so many things I will finally understand when I'm dead, but not sure wasted there, but gaining new insight.  Your poem made me feel sad...I hope that you are alright.  

Martie
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3 posted 2005-10-16 12:05 PM


Back with a final thought from a poem of mine:

When a spirit is set free
across the chasm there is a breeze
that nibbles ripples into the lake
even when breath is unplugged

it holds a minute
to navigate the loss
and plant a pulse
so quick that robins in cocking head
turn in sweet bewilderment

Listen to the dreams that come
when you are open to dimension
and time spreads itself

and you will know that love
has no boundaries
and that it understands forgiving
before your tear has
left its small circumference on the pillow

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2005-10-16 12:25 PM


"where there are no reasons left to cry,
stored away with little quiet songs
thoughts sung by a startled bird,
in simple notes of last goodbye."

That's cause I don't say g'nite until sun up.



Dream sweet, lovie, I'll stand guard.

an interesting moon tho, ain't she?

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2005-10-17 12:37 PM


icebox
A beautiful litotes.

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6 posted 2005-10-17 06:02 PM


"where there are no reasons left to cry,
stored away with little quiet songs
thoughts sung by a startled bird,
in simple notes of last goodbye."


Amazing write..I don't know how many times I can say that.

Magnus
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7 posted 2005-10-17 06:18 PM


Awesome....you have a way with words that is
certainly envied...

icebox
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8 posted 2005-10-17 08:53 PM


Thank you all for your time in reading, for your thoughts and for your very kind comments!


CocoBaci
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9 posted 2005-10-18 02:56 AM


I very much enjoyed this read Icebox...

MGROVES
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10 posted 2005-10-23 10:48 PM


AWESOME, SIR. YOUR JUST AWESOME

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 2005-10-25 09:30 AM


You always learn me with your words.  



"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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