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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2005-10-12 02:08 PM


There are words that are meant to be said,
there are those that are kept locked away.
In the still of a forested glade
certain phrases may sound in ones' head.

Echoed thoughts from a moss covered stone
in a hallowed cathedral of trees,
where a carpet of pine needles lay,
centuries old, undisturbed, left alone.

Sounds may drift in accord with the past
a connection, some link that is formed,
when all thoughts of the outer world fade
then, it seems as forever might last.

Where are secrets then gathered to store,
fleeting notions of days long ago,
told by those that some memory hears,
a recital by those gone before.

Those whose voices are carried by wind
as it moves on its' course though the trees,
telling secrets I've only begun
to descibe, much to my own chagrin,

Of the two types of words only one
may we tell, lest the spell be undone.

© Copyright 2005 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2005-10-12 02:56 PM


absolutely georgous writing...going back for another read....

I heard a tone of Irish...just a tad

Martie
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2 posted 2005-10-12 02:56 PM


Doc

I love the thought of the secrets from long ago whispering in wind of woods.  Your poem is magical!

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3 posted 2005-10-12 11:16 PM


what a beauty of a write! loved the sound of this, the whispering of secrets
quote:

Echoed thoughts from a moss covered stone
in a hallowed cathedral of trees,
where a carpet of pine needles lay,
centuries old, undisturbed, left alone

A Romantic Heart
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4 posted 2005-10-13 03:51 AM


Loved the choice of words and the story your poem told, beautiful writing...

~ARh

"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take - but by the moments that take our breath away."

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2005-10-13 04:22 AM


And the corners, circles be
and murmering is summoning
St. Michael strikes the binds
that we
lock as shackles on our feet
praying to St. Anthony
for that last elusive key
lost amid the dangling
of the jangles of our keep--
too many secrets kept forgot.


Larry C
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6 posted 2005-10-13 07:34 PM


Doc,
You are a wordsmith ya' know. You'll hook me with your style and nature is my favorite venue. Nice.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 2005-10-13 08:20 PM


LeeJ.
Thanks so much. I've read some of your pieces, and although I'm more of a stickler for the traditional forms, must say that I find your work to be very expressive, in a way that I would like to incorporate more of into my own writings.Thaks again.
Doc

Martie,
Thanks. As opposed to most of what I write,
I have been to this place. If inspiration
could be bottled, it would spring from there. It's located on a very small island in the middle of a river in upstate N.Y., Adirondack region. The place itself, is magical. Thanks again.
Doc

Midnitesun,
Thanks, a departure for me, while still using rhyme, I tried to use it more sparsely. I hope it gave the piece a more ethereal tone,
Doc

ARH,
Thank you.
Big nature buff, out in it every chance I get.
Doc

Serenity,
Thanks. So good to hear from you, hope all is well. Read a couple of your pieces of late, as usual, hit and run, no reply, but that don't mean I don't check up on ya.
Be extraordinary, as always,
Doc

Larry C.
Thank you so much, I strive to do well at whatever I do, but, I must say that this is often the most frustrating of pursuits. Things never seem to be just right, yet, once in a while, something will seem to almost write itself. Those tend to be my favorites ( guess I'm just lazy !)
Doc

Denise
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8 posted 2005-10-16 09:29 PM


You make me want to try writing again. Beautiful expression, Doc!
CocoBaci
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9 posted 2005-10-18 02:59 AM


A fantastic read Dr. Moose1...
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