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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2005-10-08 03:55 PM



The Germans
Had a weapon
Called a Bouncing Betty

If you set it off
The thing would jump up
About waist level
And explode

It’s best
You understand girl
I am watching you

And you can’t do much harm
To a scar


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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-10-09 01:29 AM


smile...it's just like me to read a warning "caution" and enter anyway.

A more ominous tone from your usual, but I liked the Bouncing Betty analogy much.

Not what I am accustomed to from you, John, but I liked the edge, as I understand edges.

I'd argue the scar thing tho.

I've had one go keloid m'self.

Enjoyed, although I missed the zen of you in this'n.

It's good to be home and you are indeed, always an interesting and thoughtful read.



Know I read you always.


Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
2 posted 2007-04-25 03:12 PM


Caution is good. acar or not will all be hurting.

good poems.

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