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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2005-10-06 08:17 AM


we knelt at the jordon
it has carpet now there
and the water is clear
bottled by some gentile

but sold by our brethren
at a plus tax and recycle
benchmark above dasani
but ours is holier than thou

you looked womanly in your ball cap
and the tee that clung
to your self development
via goldsteins constructive process

the digital candles were blessed
our allergies didn't suffer
the burning wax sacrifices
or the stains on jordon's new pile

and forgiveness closed at a convenient 8:30

_____________

dark


scribnote: based upon a almost true discussion about world economic structure at the circle k on vinyard..

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (10-06-2005 09:22 AM).]

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2005-10-06 08:41 AM


this places a precious smile on the readers face...soft spoken yet, the visuals are dressed in greatness....

enjoyed

Obsidian Snow
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2 posted 2005-10-06 10:03 AM


world economy, certainly an ever changing subject.

I wish to be an invisable force listening to your conversations.  


Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2005-10-06 12:57 PM


So now that you've successfully transported me via imagery to two far-apart places I know firsthand...
so now, a Jordanian hillside sits in front of my eyeballs humorously juxtaposed next to big Oxnardian circle K, complete with coffee pots and slushy machines

Martie
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4 posted 2005-10-06 02:52 PM


DS

Amazing imagery and a priceless ending!!


JamesMichael
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5 posted 2005-10-07 12:40 PM


Nice...James
Sunshine
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6 posted 2005-10-07 06:37 AM



Keep sharing your scribblenotes...


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