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Enchantress
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0 posted 2005-09-30 10:42 AM






The woman's portrait
which took all day   does not
show   perhaps   the
exact line of light

entering at the precise time,
the living room-studio
in which she stood for two hours,
unnaturally still.

There is
about all this
the hungering for attention,
or an unexpectedly

occurring event    she wills it
against reason    a line of pictures
streamed through her mind
as the artist gets ready    then

parades herself proudly
in a child's smile...{an amber ring discarded}
a fading insistence of white
flowers in shadow.

She turns
to capture   the best angle…
the light is dimming
changing.


© Copyright 2005 Nancy Lee - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
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1 posted 2005-09-30 10:56 AM


Just lovely writing here..and the picture beautiful..thank you..

Goldenrose.

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Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2005-09-30 10:57 AM


Always an interesting read Nancy ... does anyone really capture the moment with a photograph?
You do it better, with words

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3 posted 2005-09-30 11:00 AM


Yes.....how wonderful is this?!!
Going to be a new favourite for me.
nodding in understand
luv & miss ya !!

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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4 posted 2005-09-30 11:10 AM


Enchantress~
You word-framed the painting with exquisite beauty~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

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Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2005-09-30 11:18 AM


Enchantress,
All this and heaven too.

Margherita
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6 posted 2005-09-30 11:22 AM


The fascination of art ... yours in association with the picture ...

So well rendered. Absolutely beautiful.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

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7 posted 2005-09-30 11:30 AM


hey pretty lady, this is just beautiful.....hugsss you
darkling
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8 posted 2005-09-30 12:13 PM


The warmth of the picture is brought out in the softness, the quietness of the words. I love the secondary thought of "an amber ring discarded." how it is almost whispered.  Beautiful read.
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9 posted 2005-09-30 12:26 PM


wonderful simply wonderful
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

iliana
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10 posted 2005-09-30 03:39 PM


NancyLee, I really enjoy the way you see things.....and write them!   ....jo
Earth Angel
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11 posted 2005-09-30 03:49 PM


The portrait you painted with your words surpasses the portrait painted by the artist's paint brush.


Linda

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12 posted 2005-09-30 06:10 PM


A striking write Tinker.  Your words create a story behind the picture.  Beautifully written.  You paint so well with words.

believe in what your heart feels...

StevenS
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13 posted 2005-09-30 07:33 PM


Enchantress, many an artist would love to see as you see. Beautiful with a touch of elegance, and a shade of mystery!
Martie
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14 posted 2005-09-30 07:36 PM


Nancy.....lovely word art, as always!  
Enchantress
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15 posted 2005-09-30 09:21 PM


Philip~Thank you so very much for your kind comments.  Hugs.

Rex~So good to see you again!  Sending hugs up the 401 at ya!
I don't know of too many who are able to capture that perfect picture.
Hugs and thank you.

Chris~Thank you little sister..for your reply and understanding.  
Hugs and miss ya too!

Marge~Thank you m'friend...I so much appreciate your replies.  Hugs.


Enchantress
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16 posted 2005-09-30 09:26 PM


Seymour~Yes..all this and Heaven too.
Mega hugs to you.  

Margherita~I so much welcome your reply.  
Thank you so much.  Hugs.

Lauren~And, a big hello to you too!
Hugging you back sweet lady.

darkling~I am so pleased you mentioned the discarded amber ring...it was an after-thought to add a few questions to the piece.
Hugs!

Bernie~Thank you for the 'simply wonderful'!
It is appreciated.


Enchantress
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17 posted 2005-09-30 09:32 PM


Jo~Your reply is so much appreciated.  Hugs.

Linda~You are just SO endearing.  Hugs YOU!

Scorpio~You are so kind to me..I thank you.
Hugs and luv ya.
*I'm terrible with a paint brush though*

Steven~I'm pleased you enjoyed this piece.
A touch of mystery at times is the right ingredient. Hugs.

Martie~Dear one...if only I could write like you...if only.  Thank you for taking the time to read and reply.  Big Hugs.

kayjay
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18 posted 2005-10-01 09:46 AM


Of course, by the time I get here all the good words are taken.  That is such an arresting photograph, and your words are matchless.  Hugs, Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Enchantress
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19 posted 2005-10-01 09:56 AM


Ken~A comment from you...is truly appreciated.  Big hugs to you m'friend.
Waterfall27
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20 posted 2005-10-01 12:29 PM


lovely write

Enchantress
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21 posted 2005-10-01 12:36 PM


Christine~Thank you for stopping by, reading and commenting.  Hugs.
ice
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22 posted 2005-10-02 08:25 AM


­Oh, I do like this one, Nancy
How it comes around full circle, giving full credit to artist and subject
by close and careful examination...and yet the artist and subject have become much more than the sum of their parts, that is to say that it is by poetry that the painter and model, considered one plus one in arithmetic terms adds to many more than two when the scene is put to poetry, especially by the hand of one so polished in wordcraft.

The woman has stood in the same place for two hours, and the light and shadow have changed...But, perhaps more importantly, so has she , and also the artist..her standing was "unnaturally still" exactly, but in reality her body was moving constantly, changing like the light.

"There is
about all this
the hungering for attention"

Indeed so, a hungering for attention, in both the artist and subject...a very important part of this poem, well stated.

"(she) parades herself proudly
in a child's smile...{an amber ring discarded}
a fading insistence of white
flowers in shadow."

Yes, she does.
So here we have an exposition of human vanity, the desire to remain youthful
...parading, proudly around with a child's smile...
Also giving in to odd social value...the thought that things virginal are
of higher value than things not...a giving in to juvenile, masculine thought perhaps.

..."{an amber ring discarded}" she is not married
Do the white flowers signify virginity?

"She turns
to capture   the best angle…
the light is dimming
changing."

There it is, that most important demonstration of the poets art, the full circle, in the last stanza-
The connection to root...
There is much more to these words than meets the eye,
more that what image meets the painters eye, or the eye of the model...

These words explain what meets the poets eye,
and to me, are much more important, and profound than the rest of the trinity...
The beauty of the subject will fade, as will overtime, the painter and his canvas..
But the poets words are immortal.

Thank you, Nancy, as you can tell, I enjoyed this poem...

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Enchantress
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23 posted 2005-10-02 09:13 AM


Wow!  Ford thank you so much for your insightfulness!

One quick note..the discarded amber ring.
Perhaps she is married but does not want anyone or someone to notice the ring in the portrait, therefore removes it?

I appreciate your thoughts SO much.

Hugs~Nancy

Thomas119gold
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24 posted 2005-10-02 11:47 AM


Beautiful

Two thumbs up

Enchantress
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25 posted 2005-10-02 01:22 PM


Thomas~I thank you for your time and 'thumbs up' very much.  
Hope all is getting back to normal in Biloxi.
Hugs

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