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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2005-09-30 08:25 AM

I Stayed

I stayed within a winter’s cold
Raging at the force of hold
Pacing up and down the floor
Until I could withstand no more

I rubbed together sticks desire
Lit myself a raging fire
Warmed my hands to hold a pen
And set myself to work again

And there within the tick and tock
I rhymed my pen the sound of clock
And with my pen besides my nose
I built a world of presuppose

To wit the words did warm the breeze
To melt the white of storm and freeze
To lay this wood upon the fire
To warm the brood of my desire

I packed swag in which to soar
And filled a bag of metaphor

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

1 posted 2005-09-30 08:28 AM

consistant poetic excellence

Gloom

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2005-09-30 08:59 AM

Perfect, absolutely perfect rhyme and rhythm Sy.
Now how about you warm yourself with a hot cup of Chai tea?
~

&

Nancy ~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Obsidian Snow
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since 2005-08-24

Posts 88

3 posted 2005-09-30 09:54 AM

You write and rhyme like a pro.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2005-09-30 10:23 AM

Just perfect Seymour!
Very much enjoyed the flow of this.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2005-09-30 11:15 AM

Professor,
Now thats a lovely reply.

Nancy,
Sounds good to me.

Obsidian,
Thank you so much.

Chris,
Thank you sweety.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2005-09-30 11:27 AM

quote:
To wit the words did warm the breeze
To melt the white of storm and freeze
To lay this wood upon the fire
To warm the brood of my desire

You and your pen are always a treat, dear Seymour!

You do fulfill each other's desire!

... and the reader enjoys the gift.

Thank you.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2005-09-30 12:52 PM

Margherita
Hugs back my dear.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

8 posted 2005-09-30 02:36 PM

Sy....Do you give lessons on how to do all that? I want to sign up!

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

9 posted 2005-09-30 02:44 PM

I always enjoy your word play and how wonderfully you place each thought....

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

10 posted 2005-09-30 03:32 PM

Mr. T. ~

I will pay you a very high price for a bag of your metaphors!!!

EA

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

11 posted 2005-09-30 05:26 PM

Martie
For you it would be free.

Greeneyes
Thank you dear.

Earth Angel
For you it would be no charge.

StevenS
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since 2005-09-21

Posts 945
L. A. (Lower Alabama)

12 posted 2005-09-30 07:19 PM

Seymour, looking at the reply's you inspire I don't think it would be safe to claim to be your biggest fan. But I might be! :-)

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

13 posted 2005-09-30 07:41 PM

StevenS
LOL My humble thanks

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

14 posted 2005-09-30 08:18 PM

Glad you stayed....and glad you warm our days! *hugeroos*.....jo

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

15 posted 2005-09-30 08:22 PM

iliana
Thank you for the hugeroos.

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

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On A Journey To The Unknown

16 posted 2005-09-30 10:32 PM

This is absolutely fantastic. I really enjoyed it.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

17 posted 2005-09-30 11:23 PM

SmartChick
Thank you dear.

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

18 posted 2005-10-01 12:13 PM

nice to read you. have missed your smiles. bless you,sir

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

19 posted 2005-10-01 07:57 AM

MGROVES
The blessing is yours.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

20 posted 2005-10-05 02:33 PM

Could I borrow from that bag? *G* This is excellent, my friend... it's good to read you again! *S*

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

21 posted 2005-10-05 02:36 PM

suthern
Where have you been, missed you.

RennieandBoo
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since 2003-09-02

Posts 47
Florida!

22 posted 2005-10-05 02:38 PM

I'm an OLD NEWBIE! haha meaning I don't come on often ad I should, but Iam here now working on my poems again. I can understand that poem very well! I love it ! I love rymhing! :-)

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

23 posted 2005-10-05 03:15 PM

RennieandBoo
Well thank you very much.

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