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Ericc
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0 posted 2005-09-27 07:17 PM



And later this morning...with my
hands still feeling the
tremor of our last
touch -

I wondered of this continuation.

Of how our touch remains
incomplete...for there
is no end.

There is no destination.

No journey.

Only this continuous tremor of
no completion.

As if water droplets that have no
need to seek the
ocean....

We simply abide in the moment of
offered motion.

The ocean is given poetic
patience -

It is grand and full of its
wait to receive.

Yet it is the water drops that merge to a
greater essence...that give of their
selves to enter into waiting
waves.

And again it is the same drops that
answer the pull of heat and
sun and merge once more
upon a cloud,

Rain drops know there is no
ultimate self.

There is only this journey.

So I wondered of our
touch...

Of the magic of our incompletion.

And I smiled as the tremor of
my hand faded so.

As if I had just left the
ocean.

Knowing I would return.

[This message has been edited by Ericc (09-28-2005 07:00 AM).]

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Sharksbean
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1 posted 2005-09-27 07:43 PM


thank you for posting this it was very nice
garysgirl
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2 posted 2005-09-27 07:53 PM


Eric, this is such a romantic
and tender poem. I loved it.
It feels like a soft touch of words.
Absolutely beautiful.
Hugs,
Ethel


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3 posted 2005-09-27 08:04 PM


"There is only this journey.

So I wondered of our
touch...

Of the magic of our incompletion.

And I smiled as the tremor of
hand faded so.

As if I had just left the
ocean.

Knowing I would return."

Eric..this..this is pure poetry.
Soft, sensual, beautiful.
Thank you for this extremely entrancing piece of work.
Hugs~Nancy

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Margherita
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4 posted 2005-09-28 06:18 AM


quote:
Yet it is the water drops that merge to a
greater essence...that give of their
selves to enter into waiting
waves.

And again it is the same drops that
answer the pull of heat and
sun and merge once more
upon a cloud,



... in this concert in which there is a merging of poetry and science of Universal beauty I join with my own voice, whispering  ... dear Eric you have caught the magic of our infinite BEING and of our being infinite LOVE.

Simply awesome!

I love you.
Margherita

LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-09-28 09:28 AM


this was like reading morning's dauphin...absolutely beautiful
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2005-09-28 09:32 AM


Ericc
Everything is intermingled. Enjoyed

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7 posted 2005-09-28 10:16 AM


Beautifully soft piece Ericc.
much enjoyed, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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8 posted 2005-09-28 03:21 PM


Eric, what a treat it is to read something like this today! Thanks for the nice flow, the fluidity of positive thoughts.


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9 posted 2005-09-28 05:30 PM


"Of how our touch remains
incomplete...for there
is no end"....."there is only journey"


WOW Yes Ericc, hoping the journey is endless....

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands
~~**~~

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10 posted 2005-09-28 07:47 PM


Eric,

   I only have time for one read tonight and the title of your poem caught my eye.  I'm so glad I saw it!  This is absolutely wonderful!  I welcome it into my library with all the other poems from the fine poets here!  Thanks.  Just gorgeous!

             miscellanea

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11 posted 2005-09-28 08:30 PM


To know this odyssey is to be truly blessed.
Smiles,
TD

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12 posted 2005-09-28 09:39 PM


this write as a tremor that holds one in the core of all the senses...excellent!
Bodger
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13 posted 2005-09-28 10:28 PM


Essence captured

Bodger

iliana
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14 posted 2005-09-29 12:30 PM


Eric, this is absolutely gorgeous!!!  

I especially liked the lines, "Rain drops know there is no ultimate self.  There is only this journey."

.....jo


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15 posted 2005-10-05 02:19 PM


Of how our touch remains
incomplete...for there
is no end.

There is no destination.

No journey.

Only this continuous tremor of
no completion.

This is indeed magical... both the moment... and your write of it. *S* Gorgeous!!

Janet Marie
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16 posted 2005-10-21 04:14 PM


As if water droplets that have no
need to seek the
ocean....

We simply abide in the moment of
offered motion.

The ocean is given poetic
patience -

It is grand and full of its
wait to receive.

Yet it is the water drops that merge to a
greater essence...that give of their
selves to enter into waiting
waves.

And again it is the same drops that
answer the pull of heat and
sun and merge once more
upon a cloud,

Rain drops know there is no
ultimate self.

There is only this journey.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


I bookmarked this poem back when first posted till I could come back and reply and place in my library...

I love when I come across writes like this...(poetry that reminds me why I love
poetry so much)

I know you usually post more succinct writes...Ive been a fan of your unique style since first reading you, but I have to tell you this longer offering looks really good on your muse and I hope to see more like this from you.

a most impressive write poet sir.

Martie
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17 posted 2005-10-21 04:22 PM


Eric

"And I smiled as the tremor of
my hand faded so.

As if I had just left the
ocean.

Knowing I would return."

Beautiful and so true.  

Honeybunch
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18 posted 2005-10-21 04:26 PM


I don't know how I missed this but I'm glad to have read it now.  You've touched a deep ocean with this marvelous write.
James_A_Fraser
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19 posted 2005-10-21 10:31 PM


Yes. Just yes. This resonates in me like a plucked string. Well done.



~~J

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20 posted 2005-10-23 08:40 PM


Mesmerizing....well done Eric.
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