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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2005-09-27 07:53 AM


the metal of rain again
brusing the falling fruit
from some cloud's billow tree
with it's reflecting drumspeak

the day wallows her snake
through the gray mud of morning

serpentine is lovely as a woman
or a highway that loves strangers

with only temporary pretention
then folds them as slippery leaves
under here entwining paths
to the mulchery of digested memories

I crave the curves of 1 again
and how her bosom volumpts to hills
more than the hands of sky can surround
and more than enough for any man's kingdom

even in the oceans of his greedy dreams


___________

dark

scribnote:  canyons before jalama beach..

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (09-27-2005 09:05 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-09-27 07:57 AM


Highway One...
continues to mesmerize...

I do enjoy
these jaunts, Sir...

thank you.

LeeJ
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2 posted 2005-09-27 07:57 AM


you certainly paint a wondrous picture....
Morning D.S.

Dark Angel
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3 posted 2005-09-27 08:14 AM


I crave the curves of 1 again
and how her bosom volumpts to hills
more than the hands of sky can surround
and more than enough for any man's kingdom


Another wowser *smiling again*

m xx

~i want for myself your trembling~

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2005-09-27 09:05 AM


thank you ladies
for the gift of your reviews

Kahlil
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5 posted 2005-09-27 09:09 AM


nice ride
Pilgrimage
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6 posted 2005-09-27 10:02 AM


I absolutely LOVE your title.  It captured me, and I had to read the poem that went with it.  I envy your talent with titles.  And 'volumpt' --- what a great word to coin, what a wonderful image it creates.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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Saluting with misty eyes
7 posted 2005-09-27 11:48 AM


the day wallows her snake
through the gray mud of morning


Does it get any more descriptive than this???

Awesome job, Sir.

When all is said
All is done
Still I live
And carry on-
Quiet Riot

Martie
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8 posted 2005-09-27 11:58 AM


DS....Agreeing with Ringo on those lines.  Makes me want to take a ride to SF!!  
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