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Essorant
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0 posted 2005-09-25 03:47 AM


Swan and Stream


Under day's swan
Night's sleepy stream
Onglides like ghost
To dearest dream.
The lighty swan
Landing is led
Newly to dawn
Of stirrings' bed.
In shadows deep
With bending light
Slides into sleep
Flies into flight.


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Margherita
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1 posted 2005-09-25 05:36 AM


Very elegant write.

Enjoyed!

Love,
Margherita

Essorant
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2 posted 2005-09-25 08:19 PM


Thanks Margherita
Goldenrose
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3 posted 2005-09-26 11:49 AM


Nice dream like imagery..thank you..

Goldenrose.

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4 posted 2005-09-26 12:22 PM


me like
Essorant
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5 posted 2005-09-26 05:40 PM


Goldenrose & Sharksbean

Thank you both for looking at my poem.  I'm glad you enjoyed.

Martie
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6 posted 2005-09-26 08:54 PM


Your poem plays in my mind like a slow moving water color.  Enjoyed!
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7 posted 2005-09-26 09:28 PM


Martie said it perfectly!!
Much enjoyed. Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

yv
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8 posted 2005-09-26 10:00 PM


Wow...that was elegant.  Ah...to be able to write a poem with rhyme...

I'm still trying to figure out how to do that...it never was my best form!! HaHa!! Beautiful write!

Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine
Still shrouded in blinding Darkness

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9 posted 2005-09-26 10:14 PM


Loved your poem and Martie's response to it!


EA

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