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brian sites
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0 posted 2005-09-21 05:02 AM



the warmth

           breeds

and multiplies
and multiplies
  multiplies
creating
     breedingmultiples
                         drawing the
breeding
                and multiplies creatingbreeding
lashing the windwaterwarm creating
chaos of
         multiplebreeding wavewaterwind
              creating   howl
and multiplying scream and water
                  breeding chaos and a
                                           lone
cry multiplied over waterwindscreaming breeding
arms
   waving
       waving
   waving multiplied
                 created like hair waving
in a strongscreamingwind  blowing water
in  a breeding flooding
eye
            blowing slowly
   creating
            eye
multiplying zero like
                a wavewater eye
a
             calm

jail

          like

              an

                  eye

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1 posted 2005-09-21 07:18 AM



You caught up
         the whirl of this wind
and left it

moaning...

Good to see you, Bri...

Margherita
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2 posted 2005-09-21 09:23 AM


The howl is heard in this well structured piece.

Love,
Margherita

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2005-09-21 09:34 AM


the screaming and breeding is so scary...

it's hell unleased.



very well said Brian.


"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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4 posted 2005-09-21 09:38 AM


Wow !!

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5 posted 2005-09-21 12:36 PM


the way you toss the words about fits the content, makes the reader FEEL the  multiplying winds, the rushing waves
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6 posted 2005-09-21 01:17 PM


AMAZING!!!!

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7 posted 2005-09-21 01:47 PM


You captured it alright, and let's throw in a little fear shall we?
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8 posted 2005-09-21 04:32 PM


wow, very nice.. thanks for sharing.

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-Laura

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