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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
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Waukegan

0 posted 2005-09-20 11:36 PM



An abandoned cabin
Has a broken window
A single spider has made his web
Across the locked front door

The surrounding ground
Overgrown with weeds
A rusty shovel
Against the wall

A once blue car
In the mute backyard
A plastic feeder
Minus seed

Just offshore
A boat for two
Lies sunken in the sea


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
1 posted 2005-09-21 06:56 AM


One paradise lost and another found ...

Intriguing!

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2005-09-21 05:25 PM


Nice...James
Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2005-09-21 06:27 PM


I think I could paint this scene, in pale bluish grey
Angelheart
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since 2005-09-08
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Jacksonville,FL USA
4 posted 2005-09-21 08:03 PM


yessum this is very nice.. thanks for sharing.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

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