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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Come into a world not ones own in search of perfection hardly home grown joys and pains of growth marred by deception. The wheel turns takes to a wider angle from a narrower rotation The wheel, an axil turns around itself the pain and sorrow recollection You're in it plainly from the beginning to another start swimming in its current grasped by its orbit from head to foot when you rise and fall as you turn about yourself. Some would rather forget others chalk up later miseries it's a circle of life complete with flaws ragged edges. One works for the roundness strives for perfection but finds an ellipse an oval, a pear hardly anything perfectly circular others jump from bridges for another sorti. that could never be me never be me... |
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sweetpoetess Member
since 2005-02-27
Posts 428Florida |
Awesome poem. Poetry is beauty in words. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
it's a circle of life complete with flaws ragged edges'''' ~~~ all circles of life are complete with flaws....we learn from all edges..... your words are thought provoking..... enjoyed... ~~**~~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I trust you are of those who know ...We are perfect in our imperfection, it is dangerous to cling to perfection, because every little flaw is a risk that might cause depression ... Significant words, beautifully expressed. Love, Margherita |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Margherita you mean if we concentrated on any little flaw we would all get depressed? What about perfectionists that don't get depressed..maybe they'd get over anxious if their ways aren't applied |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"others jump from bridges for another sorti. that could never be me never be me..." Sounds like you are doing a lot of reflection, Martin. I liked the layout and intricacies of this poem. I envisioned a cog turning a cog at one point....interesting view. Thanks for the great read........jo |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very beautiful, and oh so true. Why must we all strive for constant perfection, when there is no such thing? Nicely done. *Meredith I'm not your type, |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ilana I suppose some reflection..co-authored a play recently called the Circle Dance, now being performed in Montreal, hence the name of the poem  |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
nicely written... |
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