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Rick
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0 posted 2005-09-19 06:58 AM


We know it means we’re past our youth
And when we’re there we’ll know the truth
We know it didn’t seem that long
When we were young and feeling strong

In this life we strive ahead
And try to climb another tread
Wander further up the track
And find there is no turning back

We tire for the hill is steep
Commitments we all try to keep
So step by step we all go on
Unto the place we then belong

The ones up further show the way
Leaving clues so not to stray
That we might glimpse what lies ahead
And reach again another tread

While glancing back we watch and find
That as we age we do not mind
And though the hill is fairly steep
Our footing we still somehow keep

And when we reach the top we find
That we are blessed by life of kind
And down the hill is just a run
To better things of yet to come


So in my life on way up hill
I’ll leave a trail that time won’t kill
And leave a rope of knots to give
My family grip and years to live

And on the other side I’ll wait
Even if the time turns late
For others that have climbed the hill
Still finding they’ve not had their fill

And we will speak of what was when
The age of youth and stories then
Enjoying pastures wild and green
Finding all is not a dream

And then we’ll knock on heavens door
As many others have before
And start to climb another hill
Where yonder will be better still



© Copyright 2005 Rick Van Weenen - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2005-09-19 07:26 AM


hmmm, my oh my, surely I have climbed that thread, and know the rewards of slipping periodically...

Hugs to you for another marvelous write from a great mind of philosophy, seeing rich things in the most mundane.

Huggles

Rick
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2 posted 2005-09-19 07:45 AM


Dear Lee, huggles back to ya, thanks for your lovely reply my friend, I put this topic forward to our writing group, will be interesting what they all come up with since many of them are quite old. Good to see you here again, have a great day and be well.

Sincerely
Rick

Paul Wilson
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3 posted 2005-09-19 10:34 AM


Rick...You explain the road thru life so very beautiful in this poem. Definately a ...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2005-09-19 01:08 PM


So in my life on way up hill
I’ll leave a trail that time won’t kill
And leave a rope of knots to give
My family grip and years to live


love it~~  I think I am halfway there myself

M

Angelheart
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5 posted 2005-09-19 01:16 PM


this is good...  Thanks for sharing... very poetic too!

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

Rick
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6 posted 2005-09-19 04:37 PM


Paul, thank you for your reply and saying it is a keeper, much appreciated.

Dear M, I know I am over half way there, steep most days till I have friends with me for a chat, great to see you here, thank you for your reply today, take care.

Dear Laura, it was a pleasure to share, thank you for your reply, again appreciated.

To you all my friends, again thank you for your replies, they were all great.

Sincerely
Rick

Kitty**
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7 posted 2005-09-20 10:14 PM


Geez...I don't know what to say....
This was beautiful reading and encouragment
to seek what is ahead of us, as our climb carries us to higher and better places.
Thank you so much for posting this!

* That which gives light, must endure burning *

LyricFetish
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8 posted 2005-09-20 11:55 PM


This was so well written, and meaningful. Your extended metaphor was perfect. I loved the ending.

*Meredith

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I'm not inflatable.

garysgirl
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9 posted 2005-09-21 12:08 PM


Rick, what a beautifully written poem. And
it's so true. Even though the steps may
get labored at times, if we will just keep
going on things will be better one day.
thanks for sharing your poem.
Hugs,
Ethel

Rick
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Victoria, Australia
10 posted 2005-09-21 04:41 PM


Kitty, nice to see here, thank you so much for your reply, it was heart felt and very much appreciated.

Meredith, lovely to see you here, your reply was great and enjoyed, thank you.

Hugs back Ethel, thank you for your reply, as always very much enjoyed and appreciated.


To you all my friends, thank you for sharing your words and your time, till soon again when we meet.

Sincerely
Rick

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