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Open Poetry #36

Dark Linked Quatrains

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2005-09-15 09:21 PM

Can I see beyond you?
Will you block my vision
Keeping all secrets tight;
Locking my emotion.

I have lost elation
Somewhere in the deep night;
I know it is somewhere
Waiting for a new light.

Will I regain my sight
In the warm morning air
Will it be there to do
Something for me to share?

I'll treat it with great care,
But to me something new,
I long for relation
Maintained by very few.

Gloom

The second and fourth lines are the rhyming lines, the first links back and the third links forward.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2005-09-15 10:57 PM

Smarty Pants!

Well done Gloom. You make these seem so simple to do.
Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2005-09-16 12:10 PM

Your rhyming backwards and forwards is brilliant,
but your last stanza says it all, and what makes life worth living.

Beautiful work, Professor Gloom~

Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

3 posted 2005-09-16 12:50 PM

awesomely done

i cant taste the poison that im drinking your death is in disguise

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