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Open Poetry #36

you won't forget me.

exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2005-09-14 10:52 PM

lonliness hits me like a wave
from a beach i've visited too many times
i swear the ocean was created with my tears
there's been so many

sometimes
i don't even know where it comes from
the tide rolls in
and i'm swept away
my heart at my feet

so you're not here to hold my hand
or my head up high
so you're not here to sit next to me
to tell me your dreams
and mine in turn
so?

the ocean,
that was created with my tears
will wash me away
but my footprints will still be on the beach
you won't forget me.

i'm sorry for not writting, things have been hectic, and i've been dried up.

Angelheart
Senior Member

since 2005-09-08

Posts 754
Jacksonville,FL USA

1 posted 2005-09-14 10:57 PM

so sad .. seems like you missed your loved one... sorry to here that ..your words were powerful tho and that is good..thanks for sharing...

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

Bodger
Senior Member

since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

2 posted 2005-09-15 12:42 PM

Lovely thoughts on missing

Bodger

Cloud 9
Senior Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 980
Ca

3 posted 2005-09-15 04:01 PM

"sometimes
i don't even know where it comes from
the tide rolls in
and i'm swept away
my heart at my feet."

Love this part!

SimplyGold
Senior Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

4 posted 2005-09-15 05:56 PM

exhale,

I can appreciate this mournful writing.
This expression of yearning and deep lonliness. Well done, impacts me. Thank you.

SG

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

5 posted 2005-09-18 12:22 PM

"i swear the ocean was created with my tears
"

I have felt like this, and this is the most gorgeous line I have ever heard describe such a thought. Enjoyed.

"I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real"
-Linkin Park_

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