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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2005-09-13 02:23 PM


I know this ache,
lingering to turn
thoughts dark

shades of black
shroud the light
from hearts
cold as stone

seeking warmth...

in reflections
of emerald eyes,
yesterdays bound
by betrayals of truth

silent screams   shatter
hopes and dreams

piercing the silence
while trying to place
jagged edges
back together again

to fit
the imperfections
of me.


I shivered once
you broke into my soul
the damage is done now
I'm out of control...
How did you get to me?  {Wynona}

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iliana
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1 posted 2005-09-13 02:27 PM


Even in imperfection, there is perfection.  Enjoyed this, Donna.   ....jo
Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2005-09-13 03:27 PM


Thanks Jo, I appreciate you so.



The only thing that stays the same is everything changes....T. Lawrence

Goldenrose
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3 posted 2005-09-14 06:20 AM


No imperfections with this poem..honest and well written...thank you....

Goldenrose.

Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba.

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Member Rara Avis
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4 posted 2005-09-14 10:18 PM


Donna~

you know I understand this....heart hugsss I am always around for you...

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands
~~**~~

sweetpoetess
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5 posted 2005-09-14 10:20 PM


Loved the poem. Always remember though nobodies ever gonna be perfect.

Poetry is beauty in words.
    

Angelheart
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6 posted 2005-09-14 10:47 PM


wow, this is good.. thanks for sharing. ..  very well worded .....

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

crazy4u
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7 posted 2005-09-15 02:50 AM


I like the sharpness of the last lines.  very vivid. Thank you for the poem
Obsidian Snow
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8 posted 2005-09-15 10:58 AM


Reminded me of a bible verse...something about building an alter out of the pieces of a broken heart...

enjoyed it.

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2005-09-15 11:30 AM


another layer of you
vented free
to give you wings

enjoyed it gs

Startime55
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10 posted 2005-09-15 11:57 AM


This poem reflects the worst kind of pain...My heart goes out to you...I think the imperfections are not within you but are within someone else...**big big hugs**

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
11 posted 2005-09-16 02:07 AM


piercing the silence
while trying to place
jagged edges
back together again

to fit
the imperfections
of me.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The elusive missing piece is over rated, it is our imperections that make us unique.
To hell with what anyone else thinks!     I make no excuses.....

It's always so good to read you, Donna~


Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2005-09-16 10:22 AM


Thank you, each and hugs.

Lori?
"it is our imperections that make us unique."

Amen gal!  c'mere

You all make me smile, thank you.

live for today,
dream of the future,
and learn eternal truths from the past..

Beki
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13 posted 2005-09-16 10:33 PM


last line very effective...good job
Dark Angel
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14 posted 2005-09-17 12:29 PM


we all got em, our imperfections make us who we are, and you...are beautiful!  



Mxx

~i want for myself your trembling~

Midnitesun
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Gaia
15 posted 2005-09-17 12:55 PM


I have lots of personal knowledge about imperfections.
It's a good thing most people don't dwell upon all the ones I see in the lame ME, stacked up like a mountain to the moon, for if you did?
sheesh, never mind what scene that might be thank God, or whomever, but most everyone here seems to accept me as I am...
another lump of misshapen unbaked clay
thanks for this chance for me to come clean

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown
16 posted 2005-09-18 04:22 PM


No one is perfect, but your poems are.
littlewing
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17 posted 2005-09-18 04:31 PM


"Who looks outside, dreams.  Who looks inside, awakens"
                      - Carl Jung

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