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0 posted 2005-09-13 02:20 PM



If writing worthwhile poetry is something that you choose
There are some greattechniques around that all great poets use.
Let's take a little look at how the masters set the tone
And maybe we can get some hints to help us with our own.

Enjambment is a way to break the boredom of the text
By running one line into the beginning of the next.
The reader is encouraged to continue on because
The poem makes more sense when one continues without pause.

I have to say I love the way
The sky looks in the month of May

I think that I shall never see
A poem as lovely as a tree.



A caesura is a pause placed in the middle of a line.
Combined with an enjambment, the results can be divine.
The poet takes control of where the reader stops to rest
And it can help the power of the words to do their best.

Ah, balmy breath, that dost almost persuade
Justice to break her sword!One more, one more.
Be thus when thou art dead, and I will kill thee,
And love thee after.
.................Othello


When words rhyme single syllables, it's labeled Masculine
horse - course
When words rhyme double syllables, it's labeled Feminine
crossing - embossing
Triple rhymes are tough but they can give your poem panache.
Lord Byron was a master and now we have Ogden Nash!

A wonderful bird is the pelican,
His bill will hold more than his belican.
He can take in his beak
Food enough for a week,
But I’m damned if I see how the helican.



Alliteration is a way to have a little fun.
The same sound starts most of the words until the line is done.
It gives a rapid-fire effect that makes it very strong
And rappers like to use this form when they create a song.

Suzie sells seashells by the seashore.

Peter picked a peck of pickled peppers.



Onomatopoeia - now here's a clever way
To make your words create the sounds you're trying to display.

The murmer of innumeral bees...........Tennyson

Say it slow and you can hear the humming of the bees.
Lines like this add audio to words the reader sees.


A zeugma? Not an animal that one finds in the zoo.
It's just a verb with more than just one meaning - it has two!
It uses different objects to describe two different things
And, when you use it craftily, it makes your poem sing!

"Whenever I shop at the Bijou, I get a bottle of perfume and a headache."
"I'm not getting nasty; I'm getting chapped lips."



Chiasmus uses two words twice together in a line
A-B-B-A is how to use correctly this design.
It adds a touch of music to the way the lines are read
And repetition helps to keep the words there in one's head.

Whenever I stop to shop, I generally shop until I stop.

Not that fair field
Of Enna, where Proserpin gathering flowers
Herself a fairer flower by gloomy Dis
Was gathered.
...........................Milton's Paradise Lost


The apostrophe - I don't mean the mark of punctuation
In poetic terms this word provides a different connotation.
It's talking to the dead or something that cannot talk back
A quality I'll verify my ex- wife didn't lack!!

Good Lord in Heaven!

Death, be not proud...
............. - John Donne


Synecdocheis when part is used to represent the whole.
"Give me a hand" does not mean that just your hand is my goal.
It's just a way of saying things to make your meaning clear
When you stand up before a crowd and say, "Lend me an ear."

Tell that its sculptor well those passions read

Which yet survive, stamped on these lifeless things,

The hand that mocked them.
................Ozymandius (Shelley)


The simile compares two things by using "like" or "as"
One of the greatest weapons that a clever poet has.
It helps describe an object in a multitude of ways
And, like the metaphor, it adds pure brilliance to a phrase.

The Assyrian came down like a wolf on the fold
And his cohorts were gleaming in purple and gold.
..... - Lord Byron


The metaphor Now here's the thing that makes it all worthwhile,
Producing worthwhile imagery to make one cry or smile.
It is the heart of everything a poet can produce
And it denotes the talent of the poet by its use.

We have four kinds of metaphors that we can always use.
You need to pick the one that suits you better when you choose.
The first kind names the subject and the object in the line
Julie was a gem is one of these that works out fine.

The next kind names the subject but the object is implied.
The way you use description in a smart way is your guide.
Mary's chirping away compares poorMary to a bird
And one can see that vision though you never used the word!

The third kind names the object but the subject isn't here.
Description of the object makes the subject now appear.
It falls in teardrops from the sky would make a nice refrain
And, though it isn't named, the reader knows the subject's rain.

The last kind is a tough one...only masters use it well.
No subject used - no object used there, either. What the hell!?!?
We use a double metaphor to make both meanings clear
And, if we do it wisely, our true meaning will appear.

Here it comes chugging into its sty

Into its sty? Must be a pig the author writes about.
And chugging? Like a slow train it moves toward the sty, no doubt.
So there you have the pig and train, though neither word was used.
If you don't use it well, you'll find the reader is confused.

It sifts from leaden sieves.............Emily Dickenson

So there you have some ways that many poets ply their trade.
For every great work written there were prices to be paid.
For those who want to be the very best that they can be
It's good to know the basics in this world of poetry.


© Copyright 2005 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-09-13 02:27 PM


You just said a very imformative and delightful mouthful Dear Deer. So good to see you again Michael!

live for today,
dream of the future,
and learn eternal truths from the past..

iliana
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2 posted 2005-09-13 02:37 PM


Brilliant and educational!  What more could we want!  Thanks, Balladeer....I'm saving this one.   .......jo

[This message has been edited by iliana (09-14-2005 12:34 AM).]

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3 posted 2005-09-13 04:12 PM


Oh, this is great.  Thank you for this one.  I need reminded more than once that all these strings can exist, though I tend to drop the arrow.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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4 posted 2005-09-13 11:45 PM


One plays with her feet, and the other dabbles in potpourri - thank goodness!  This is fantastic - just fantastic.  You now reside with the lady who plays with her feet.   Nicely done Michael.
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5 posted 2005-09-14 12:54 PM


I enjambed my toe once outside in the dirt
and I must admit that sucker sure hurt.

In history class, we studied Caesura,
Et tu, Brutus? I am still not too sure a
dunderhead Kansan can learn from old history,
Cause what we cain’t see, is to us just a mystery.

Into my court came a man who’d been caught,
With the odoriferous crime of potpourri smoking,
He had gotten it wrong, the wrong kind of pot,
He couldn’t even pronounce, the stuff he was toking.

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6 posted 2005-09-14 03:54 AM


Mike you are too much!  Been waiting to see something from you. This is fantastic. I printed out and will study the three pages of a fun way to learn something.  thank you, martyjo
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7 posted 2005-09-14 06:03 AM


This is a masterpiece!
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8 posted 2005-09-14 06:41 AM



Poetry 101 - and Advanced Lessons...
if everyone takes a note from you,
they'll all head to the top of the class!

Excellent work, Michael, and I do mean work.

But you do make it look so easy!

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9 posted 2005-09-14 08:03 AM


Balladeer
You have baked and cut a humbles pie
And plucked the wings of how and why
Served it up with bread and lox
You are a cunning old fox.

Nan
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10 posted 2005-09-14 08:10 AM


All righty, m'Deer - Are you posting this in the Workshop?  Purty Please?  We can put it right beside Kit while she's playing with her feet - YES?...
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11 posted 2005-09-14 08:31 AM


Alot of input, but good...  Thanks for sharing...
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12 posted 2005-09-14 02:14 PM


By the way I thought I'd tell you that you smartie pants poets "almost" take the fun out of writing   However, were it not for the likes of you, there would be not balance right?  Loved this, and forgot to save it.
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13 posted 2005-09-14 04:25 PM


(as I sift thru my Funk and Wagnall's)...this is seemingly a great great write..will let ya know after I find out what this stuff means.....LOL
you are a master sir Balladeer...and, I still hate you....

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14 posted 2005-09-14 05:06 PM


This is wonderful Balladeer. Thank you for sharing it.
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15 posted 2005-09-14 05:10 PM


this was interesting... I just didnt get all of it, but then again with this mind of mine lol but from what i read, it was good..  well thought up and well writen ..thanks for sharing..

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

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16 posted 2005-09-14 06:39 PM



Man, oh, Man! ...and to think I thought 'A Bug's Life" was your only area of expertise! You are a deer full of surprises!

Thanks! I needed that! ~ and saved it!

I'll give you more than a penny for your thoughts! I'll give you a buck for each of them! ~ You have a lot going on between those antlers of yours! Deer

You not only entertain us with your poetry, now you are teaching us!

Hugs with love,
Linda

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17 posted 2005-09-14 08:55 PM


The blessing is that those of us who are ignorant on the craft still get to write. Dang, nothing like being reminded of the depth of one's ignorance!

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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18 posted 2005-09-15 01:54 AM


Absolutely brilliant m'dear Deer...

Printing this out, a fantastic study guide.

Thank you

m xx

~i want for myself your trembling~

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19 posted 2005-09-15 02:41 AM


i know zilch about poetic structure, so this was an entertaining lesson. Thank you
Elizabeth Santos
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20 posted 2005-09-15 02:56 PM


Thank you, teacher
This is wonderful!
Liz

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21 posted 2005-09-15 06:02 PM


Nice to see you, too, gentle one!

Thank you for your kindness, iliana..

Pilgrimage...don't we all!!!

Mysteria....now THAT'S a dream come true! Thank you..

Tim...looks like he may not have been the only toker!!

martyjo...thank you! Learning's always easier when it's fun!

I thank you, honeybunch, for enjoying..

Sunshine...except for the words and the thoughts, it IS easy

Sy..OLD fox??? Ouch! That hurts!!!

Nanners..ok, I'll mosey on over there

Angelheart...and thank you for reading..

Toerag..your hate keeps me going...love you, too

Earth Angel...them antlers are getting chipped but they're still sharp! Love ya...

Larry...thinking of you brings a lot of adjectives to mind...ignorant ain't one of them!!!

Dark Angel...you could certainly teach me a thing or two about free verse! Thank you, my friend..

crazy4u..thanks for being interested in all this gobbly-gook. Hope it helps!

Ms. Santos..the day will never come that i'm your teacher. It would be an honor being your equal....thanks, Liz.


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22 posted 2005-09-16 01:40 PM


You make learning something new so much fun! This is an awesome poem. Not only educational, but also has your famous rhythm, flawless as always, and a treasure of information and examples. For once I'm jealous! to the Master!
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23 posted 2005-09-16 02:00 PM


This is absolutely brilliant 'Deer!!
I'm going to pop you into my library
to study you...I mean..um,
the meanings you have given us here and such...
OH! I wish I could write and say what I mean.
Hugs YOU!

I wait now at the lake or walking by the bay
I wait and listen or put a seashell
to my ear and it all comes back
the wind's soft murmur..and you.

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24 posted 2005-09-16 02:01 PM



Library button..

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25 posted 2005-09-16 03:49 PM


This is great! Can't thank you enough

SG

P.S. Now I just have to learn from it

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26 posted 2005-09-16 09:44 PM



Amen!

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Martie
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27 posted 2005-09-18 02:01 PM


Thank you, Mike!!  I'm taking this to my library.  
Titia Geertman
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28 posted 2005-09-18 08:22 PM


Just had to come back and read it again.

Bet you sat on that for a whole week with scattered dictionaries around you on the golf field, shouting all them fuzzy words every time they hit you with the ball

You know what I think about you Deer, you're simply the best



Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

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