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Shame On You
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Shame On You |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Shame On You I wish I could say I wished you well and I wish I didn’t have this empty sounding echo inside of me but I’m not as nice as I pretend to be I hope you… hurt and your tears run far less quietly than mine excuse me but I’m not sorry sorry for wanting you wanting you to squeeze in my skin to wear it as tightly as I do so feel the wrinkles stretch like it will burst to know how it is to taste blood on your lips as your heart breaks in liquid hourly moments drowning flooded formed in eyes that cry in moonlight and day light that can not erase lines of lies and the ache of a touch that you will never feel but hangs on the layers of every open pore that no wash or scratch will remove or forget lost in confusion look in the mirror what is it that you see do you see the deceitful liar you are making me believe things that would never be maybe it is me the mississippiness in the woman that I am and the over sensitiveness I possess swept so away in being used in the sheer name of love a shame for me but… shame on you just some words cut out |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I don't like you sad Lemme get my hands on him! oh, now, shame on me Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
over sensitive? ... NEVER!!! true to heart? ... ALWAYS!!! sorry for the grey feelings, you should never be out of warm's reach. Keep A Smile ... please? CT A word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
1slick_lady Gray is a way of life We all dance the fife Very good write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Helen..I unfortunately recall these feelings. Heart hugs. Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
..*dies* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Rath! I feel it....expressed powerfully. Sending you a hug, Helen.........jo |
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SoundWaves Member
since 2005-06-22
Posts 113Center Stage |
Powerful write. The spotlight can only get brighter. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"maybe it is me the mississippiness in the woman that I am" Now THAT is great poetic craft!!!!!!! |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Powerful, heartfelt feelings that I understand....I hope he gets what he deserves...My heart goes out to you....*big hugs* |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Well, I was not sure where this was going at first. But, I understood once I read through. Yes, I think we should let Interloper take care of this. You wrote this with such passion, shame on him. Well done indeed... SG |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ice took my favorite bit of writing, and this was one hell of a write, you slick lady you!  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Oh boy, do I know how this feels. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yes, indeed! Shame on him! ~ and on any man who makes his woman feel this way! Gosh, now I want to wring his red neck! lol Ooops, I'm getting carried away by your impassioned write! "maybe it is me the mississippiness in the woman that I am and the over sensitiveness I possess" ~ I'd prefer that that be the truth of the matter!  Good vent! Good write! Love & Light, Linda |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
all of the above and more~~ great writing Helen M |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
I usually like being reminded that you are so passionate. Actually I still do just wish it din't involve pain.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
maybe it is me the mississippiness in the woman that I am Oh yeah, love this the best.  ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
***nodding*** this is perfect. "Screw me once, shame on you. Screw me twice, shame on me." Unfortunately I was saying "shame on me" and got rid of him. A valuble lesson to learned. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Choose carefully...James |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
wow, I hope that things get better for you ...take care and thanks for sharing.... Poetry can get you very far |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
To shame on him for sure, So sick beyond any cure For who could be within your touch And not find the warmth of soul, His soul must not be enough Too small and too cold. Wishing you only the best, Gloom |
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