creeping darkness across stone

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Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2005-09-09 07:35 PM

he was too good for you
for your cold heart

always displaying your
true colors

he was just flying
across a black sky

gathering strength
to say those words

you became a moment
thats all

and it shaped your soul

like creeping darkness
across stone

~~**~~
pretending is just the
game of masquerade
my heart does not easily forget
~~**~~

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (09-10-2005 01:25 AM).]

sweetpoetess
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since 2005-02-27

Posts 428
Florida

1 posted 2005-09-09 07:37 PM

Very beautiful piece here.

Poetry is beauty in words.

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

2 posted 2005-09-09 07:38 PM

Beautiful metaphors and descriptive writing, great poem.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2005-09-09 07:53 PM

Excellent write lovely Lauren~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

ctowen
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since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

4 posted 2005-09-09 07:59 PM

I felt the thick coat of
  darkness lurking these skies ....

  ... hope tomrrows are warmer.

         nice words, great heart!

                               CT

Temptress

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since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

5 posted 2005-09-09 08:52 PM

this is the way I hope no one feels about me right now.

Sad and lovely at the same time, Greeneyes. I miss this place and your writing.

"I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real"
-Linkin Park_

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2005-09-10 09:44 AM

Julie, Meg, Nancy...

thanks for stopping in ...

Meg...good to see you...

~

~~**~~
pretending is just the
game of masquerade
my heart does not easily forget
~~**~~

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

7 posted 2005-09-10 09:48 AM

Craig...

indeed warmer...sometimes its ok for darker skies....when brighter horzions are there...

~

Jenn...SO good to see you here and know that you are safe....I appreciate you taking time to comment....

~

[This message has been edited by Ron (09-10-2005 10:26 AM).]

JesusChristPose
Senior Member

since 2005-06-21

Posts 777
Pittsburgh, Pa

8 posted 2005-09-11 10:20 AM

The meaning hits close to home for me.

And btw, this is a different style for you, Lauren. I like it.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2005-09-11 10:33 AM

"and it shaped your soul

like creeping darkness
across stone"

~ Those words shivered me timbers! Yet it was done so poetically!

Linda

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2005-09-12 02:42 PM

not having enough internet time stinks! I almost missed this. Yanno? One thing I've come to learn is that no matter what topic you write of, you do it with such perfect style and grace! Love ya

sis.

You don't mind if I keep learning from you do you?? Ok...just a lil bit??

PEACE LADY LAUREN

live for today,
dream of the future,
and learn eternal truths from the past..

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2005-09-12 05:54 PM

good read

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30

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12 posted 2005-09-14 06:29 AM

There are many magic stones...in the land where i live..all are said in myth to have soul...and an aura...writers need to have souls too...but some are cold as stones...hiding behind the magic ones with aura's...enjoyed the write here...made me think...thank you for the words..

Goldenrose.

Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

13 posted 2005-09-14 08:19 AM

Mike,

thanks for getting these words....
~~

Linda

thank you
~~

Donna~

sigh...love ya too

~~

vandana

hi there, thank you...

~~

GR

Thanks...

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands
~~**~~

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