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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2005-09-09 11:17 AM



It had been awhile since Lacey had seen
or even heard from Travis.
Life has a way of trudging on,
her life being no different.

She had made new beginnings
had suffered unexpected ends.
Yet there was always that place
in her heart that was cold and empty.

The place that held the could have been,
the maybes and the should haves.
Too late for that, she thought, as she swiped her
brow with dirty hands.

She was in the process of making a garden.
So far all she had accomplished was the ripping up of earth
leaving her dirty and unsatisfied.
She realized the more she worked the more work there was.
Maybe it wasn’t worth it, she thought.
Yet she knew, unlike in her life, she owed it to herself not to quit.
This time she was determined to cultivate something good.
This time she would bear the fruit of her labors.
Proving something to her self.

She smiled at the thought,as she
continued with her dismemberment
of earth and self.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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Bodger
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1 posted 2005-09-09 12:15 PM


Thought provoking

Deliberately designed to be incomplete

Excellent

Bodger

passing shadows
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2 posted 2005-09-09 12:29 PM


this is about as complete as anything I've ever seen

*just because I know*

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2005-09-09 12:32 PM




no...the next one is the completion.  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

latearrival
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4 posted 2005-09-09 12:34 PM


Susan, As an old gardener I understand. Sometimes it is just the digging that helps one clear the mind. Other times it is the choosing of the plants and that can be done all winter. Many times digging out rocks and planning a new garden helps one to sort out what is important and what can be dismissed. It pays if one is prone to speak before thinking, to sort it out while getting one's hands dirty. martyjo
Keep your eyes on Ophelia!

passing shadows
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5 posted 2005-09-09 12:37 PM


well ya had me fooled...agreeing with martyjo here...

this one could stand on its own

*on to read the next*

Enchantress
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6 posted 2005-09-09 12:39 PM


Excellent Susan!
Love it when you write of Lacey!
On to the next one!

iliana
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7 posted 2005-09-09 05:48 PM


Nice writing, Susan!   ....jo
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8 posted 2005-09-09 07:40 PM


She was in the process of making a garden.
So far all she had accomplished was the ripping up of earth
leaving her dirty and unsatisfied.
----

Great writing.. You've gotten really good at this. Better than me!

Angelheart
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9 posted 2005-09-09 11:26 PM


this is good.. very nice
Beki
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10 posted 2005-09-11 08:44 PM



have to agree  mad eme stop and think...very nicely done  this must be a series I have missed....

Duncan
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11 posted 2005-09-11 10:55 PM


"She was in the process of making a garden.
So far all she had accomplished was the ripping up of earth
leaving her dirty and unsatisfied.
She realized the more she worked the more work there was."

Smart girl, that Lacey...  
A garden?  I'd have never thought it.
Made me smile with this one Myrtle.


inkedgoddess
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12 posted 2005-09-11 11:16 PM


like this sue, the way you wove the setting and the theme together
Sunshine
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13 posted 2005-09-12 05:35 AM


The next one is the completion?

Heaven forbid...

that there should ever be a "completion"

to the "family"...

Susan Caldwell
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14 posted 2005-09-13 09:50 AM


and thank you all again!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

JamesMichael
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15 posted 2005-09-13 05:21 PM


You've reminded me of the yard work I have to do...soon...James
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