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0 posted 2005-09-04 07:06 PM



Two moments-
Souls emptied,
Drained of love,
Once passion filled,

Quietness-
Before the storm,
Shook the might
Of lover’s flight,

Moment-
Ad infintium
Pain peaks,
Sad filled ride,

Masked-
Fear and laughter,
As if oil
Mixed in today,

Love-
Left each other,
Lovers departed,
Tonight,

Wingless-
Sounds fill in,
The emptiness
Once not conceived,

Scarified-
For a just cause,
Hundred years,
Worth of wars,

Who is greater?
Ask no another,
But true love
Follows one chime,

Filled instance-
Droplet clouded,
Lost its purity,
Love hanging warily.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

© Copyright 2005 Ronil B Tataria - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2005-09-04 09:56 PM


Your poem was very well done.

I especially liked this:

"Who is greater?
Ask no another,
But true love
Follows one chime"

Excellent verse.
TD

Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time
2 posted 2005-09-07 12:14 PM


I lost it on the bottom 3 to 4 versus

Writing well at times we write too long with the message that meant so much to us

Words I could follow but lost

Nice read - just the same

Bodger

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