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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2005-09-04 12:58 PM


We are transient

We understand to take flows

To take nothing more

We never ask

For the temptation

Absorbing

Because we

Do

So

And like a magic

(It is maybe in the Genes (now how  did prouncouce this

Perhaps

In a world where we live and care and not use)

I talked to my mother one night about trips
And a river that flowed in symbol across a carpet
We talked about the forests and the live that would stretch
We talked about what would be achieved

The river we knew

We have always known and enjoyed the flakes of snow

The walk under dreams to be held

To be at what we felt was right

Maybe I will get my head around tiger woman, stomach woman, the characters I invented "Prilloch, Midnight Blue, The Boy, Parky"

The all form something

And like a lot of people who post here pain of various areas especially as a "talented person", being used.


Bodger

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Ericc
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1 posted 2005-09-04 04:09 PM


Very creative language and expression.
Wonderful write!

Eric

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2 posted 2005-09-04 06:24 PM


Bodger~
While I might not understand your closing line, I did greatly like this part -

'I talked to my mother one night about trips
And a river that flowed in symbol across a carpet
We talked about the forests and the live that would stretch
We talked about what would be achieved

The river we knew'


*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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3 posted 2005-09-04 06:59 PM


sometimes you leave me speechless Bodger
Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time
4 posted 2005-09-04 07:26 PM


And sometimes I should learn to stop writing but I let it flow and I end up wondering because it flew and as I write it is still that immense weight on my back to write what I know I should write but maybe when I am finally penniless and there is nothing else, I will write and maybe that is the river on the carpet and there is no-way over.

My mother and I talked about it 1998 I thin.

She knew she had "Als" and she asked me whether she would be able to travel and see.

Bodger

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